Starving little birdies

 

Starving little birdies,

 

pluck out your eyes so you may cry.

 

Restless little birdies,

 

clip your wings so you may fly

 

Chirping little birdies,

 

Pierce your tongue so you may speak

 

Guilty little birdies

 

Climb to the edge so you may dive from the tree

 

Your body will shatter for the whole world to see

 

Unlike you who cannot speak

 

Unlike you who has no eyes

 

Unlike you who has no wings

 

Author's Note

Review please!

Reviews

[Taylor]

OK, I like this a lot. I can't really critique because I am truthfully not knowledgeable enough to do so. I'm totally new to all this... I came here to check out your work after seeing your review on my writing. Thank you by the way for your insight. I'll take all I can get. ( I took down a few pics... got to thinking about it... you're totally right) So anyway, in this poem, I understand the opposites... (Starving... pluck out your eyes, Restless....clip your wings... etc) which ultimately lead to the point of total vulnerability. Are we most conscerned with the opinions of others? Or our own capacity? The world will always have its "say so".... I may be entirely wrong. Give me your feedback. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Talk to you soon!

[Omar Fendri]

oh my goodness, the metaphor is damn great here. I really love and I have nothing to add but perfect. I enjoy reading it a lot :)

[Prodigo]

lol, shows how much I know about poetry. I thought this was my worst piece. Thanks for clearing that up.

[eli mercuree rue]

what is it to mean if meaning is meaningless....

vulnerability is only a superficial piece of this poem
to me it's more about exploration and breaking out of the constraints that bond us unknowingly to the pockets of knowledge that we as humans have constructed in order to understand this thing that we have created for ourselves to understand...

on the edge of our emotions or better said, in the wreck ouf our frustration
we always find a sense of freedom...

anarchy... [live on]

[Michael X]

I must say, you've done well here, it reminds me of a reflective metaphor
for real life, and expresses such as anguish, and cruel imagery, no doubt 100
consistant imagery and feeling and humor, brilliant job prodigo
i really enjoyed reading this

[wolfshrew]

I can imagine hearing this as a song, it was beautifully written.

[Adora.xo]

Wow O.o... Okay so I enjoyed how with every line you lose something, and with every-line it intensifies the vulnerability, Eyes, wings, tongue... And the in the end you see the full impact, or consequence of such a vulnerability. It kind of get you thinking... Makes you think of people who actually have endured that, are enduring that, and makes you thankful that you have not been deprived of such things... I would actually like to hear from you what you were thinking while you wrote this piece, if it isn't too much to ask hehe. But honestly, you most definately ARE a poet. I don't read many poems that have the originality and in-depth feel that yours do! Keep it up love!

xoxo
Rose

[Saturn's Lover]

I enjoyed this poem a lot.