Choices

This one is about confusion and choices; choosing to hold on or move on, choosing to deal with the pain or ignore.

I might be going crazy

Writing poems no one will see

Its the only way I know right now

The reason for it is he

He who always stayed

When everyone left

Love for me

He always kept

No matter how much I hurt him

Or how much he hurt me

We swore we would never leave

Together we'd always be

It was an unspoken agreement 

Between two sacred hearts

I don't know what went wrong

Now all he wants is to be apart

He found someone else

Probably someone better than me

Maybe she doesn't give him pain

But she will never make him happy

We had our bad times

But the good exceeded them by a mile 

Maybe he should reconsider

Because I can't hold on longer than a while

My heart breaks every time I remember

I remember he chose her

He might be angry

But he doesn't love her

I'm in too much pain

And I don't know what to do

But he might come back to me soon

Or I might move on too

Author's Note

I wrote this a while back, so it isn't how I feel now. But I thought I would share.

Reviews

[Wonderful Letdown]

A very well-written piece!!! You really got the reader to feel the pain, the confusion, the loss, the sadness. I love the last line as it gives a twinge of hope for the future. The only thing I would say needs to be improved are the lines below (corrections are capitalized):


"Love FOR me" (The word 'for' is repeated twice, I would recommend taking out one of them)

"But the good exceeded them BY a mile" (Adding the word 'by' just makes it flow better)

Keep up the great work!! I really enjoyed it!!

[ProCoacoa]

Thank you so much! That was a very helpful review and the corrections are made :)

[Wonderful Letdown]

Ya, no problem. Glad to be of some help.

[Scott Metro]

Well done...love and loss...

Scott

[ProCoacoa]

Thanks Scott :)

[sonnie ibadah]

wow! just another regular heartbreak huh?
"He found someone else
Probably someone better than me...." i know the feeling too well. i like the honesty in it, it shows that feeling we always have, that we are not worth that somebody or we love them enough to let them go and be happy, even if it is with someone else. nice work again, thank you for sharing!

[ProCoacoa]

Heartbreak is heartbreak. But they all seem new and different each time. No matter how many you experience, you are bound to have mixed emotions every time.

Thank you for your review Sonnie :)

[Raymond Federle]

Great poem! I get the same thing with people thinking that I live what I write. Well, sometimes I do but mostly it's just me putting words and sentences together to form a very cool written structure. Some people pour their hearts out on a page but I just tend to write for it's own sake. If I feel that I want to write about something I don't know to much about I 'google' it, (LOL) and go from there. Once again great piece. :)

[ProCoacoa]

Haha thanks Raymond! Im glad to see Im not the only one who does that. But this poem really was me pouring my heart out. Its not how I feel now because its an old poem.

Thanks for your review :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

People hurt us and justify their actions by trying to blame us.If he chose someone else that is his loss and you need to be strong and safe in the knowledge that you deserve better.Your words are nicely written.

[ProCoacoa]

It IS his loss, and I am much happier now than I was with him.

Thank you Vidya, I really appreciate your reviews :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are most welcome dear friend .

[Solitary Traveler]

I can definitely understand this piece. A hole is left in the place of the one who left, and their departure was unexpected. There is concern for the one who left, that they would never find what you gave to them, but at the same time, there is still a pictured end. Poetry is a great outlet for the emotions that overwhelm us. I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.

[ProCoacoa]

Thank you so much :) I love reading your inputs!