Guilt in Tears

GUILT IN TEARS

Sobbing and weeping make no sense, I know, dear.

Only the rivers of guilt flow down in form of tears.

Recalling the gone time is like stabbing yourself.

Cursed I speak,"why to love the one who can't be for my self".

Burning the tainting good photographs of a heart is better

than feeling the nightmares, realising me my great failures.

Moving to good roads is far-sighted among brave steps

than yelling to walk on bad roads which sting like sea crabs.

Deep down in nights, I listen to my own cries, oh dear.

In remorse, regretting, and find guilt in my tears.

for why I met and hugged you like u were my teddy bear.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Overall your expressions are unique & unexpected, many creative ways to say what you're saying. I did not read this as a regular-rhyming poem, so I disagree with one of your reviewers (comment about last line) -- I like the teddy bear imagery, it sounds cuddly. In a few places, grammar construction sounds a little awkward . . . (line 3) "gone time" not clear what this means . . . "tainting good photographs" unusual combination of adverb/adjective . . . "realizing me my great failures" - wondering about "me my" repetition? But other than these little spots, overall your descriptions are original & vivid ("which sting like crabs" -- excellent). Fondly, Margie

[Priyanshi]

Thank you so much ma'am...i respect your review:))

[Anshuman Aryav]

Wow! From the starting to the end, I have enjoyed this.... creation..
Amazing..
Keep writing Priya..

[Priyanshi]

Thank you so much AA ... for the lovely review:))

[DiaryKay]

I can find no words... beautiful

[Priyanshi]

It means a lot Sir.....thank u so much:))

[Pragati Chaudhary]

That's sweet yet refreshing dear :)
Dear Sister, Keep writing!

[Priyanshi]

THnk u so much my sweet sister.....after a long time,....how r u doing?

[Pragati Chaudhary]

Ohhhh! That's so lovely to hear from you after a long period of time.....I am good. how are you ? DM me

[Priyanshi]

:)) am also good
:))

[Najam Us Saher]

I liked the entire poem except the last line in which you forced the rhyme by writing teddy bear.

[Priyanshi]

Thank you Najam so much for the kind words.....may be my line is not good.
:))

[Najam Us Saher]

I don't say that it is not good, It looks a bit childish. Don't let my words discourage you.
You are welcome.

[Priyanshi]

Oh.....No problem
:))

[wordman]

sometimes those memories just linger to long,great write

[Priyanshi]

Correct sir....Thnk u so much for kind review:))

[wordman]

you`re welcome