Scarlet Teardrops

The gridlock of thoughts in mind's  cell.

Am spiritless; as lodging in a black hole.

Failing to extricate the prickling spears

nor can uncouple the unwelcome fears.

 

Rosiness of the heart is  vanishin'.

Anger is pulling off my fear's skin.

All known to him, but he reacts unknown.

Am not the one, he thinks me, as am being shown.

 

Despair eyes mapping out a highway,

Through cheeks and flushing out the dears.

 Are tears out of fear or it's rage gear?

Don't know! but it's pure tears - "scarlet drops of tears".

Reviews

[Pooja Chintamani]

I can say u written scarlet but those tears r too amazing in your verse shining each emotion fluently with magically words of flow

[Priyanshi]

Thank you so much , Pooja....Glad to read the lovely review:))

[Zoya]

Scarlet tears...that's creepy in itself. The agony in the piece came out hard and clear. Well done!

[Priyanshi]

Thank you so much, Zoe.....glad to read the lovely review:))

[Zoya]

Most welcome

[Pragati Chaudhary]

this is a lovely Piece...........full of Life

[Priyanshi]

Hey, How r u?
Thnk u so much, for the lovely review.

[Pragati Chaudhary]

I am very fine dear sister

[Priyanshi]

great...keep smiling:)

[wordman]

lovely name,life is full of tears,lost dreams and love we thought to be true

[Priyanshi]

true, sir...life is an ocean of tears.
Thnk u for the lovely review:)

[barleygirl]

I like "scarlet drops of tears" (after reading Najam's review) . . . All in all your tearful sentiments are creatively expressed and nicely original. I like the way you play with the sounds of words, in unstructured rhymes. Some of your phrases sound like shorthand & the reader may need to fill in some blanks (a good thing). Keep expressing yourself! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Priyanshi]

Thank you so much, for the lovely review, Ma'am.
Now, I think , I shall change the title. Shall n't I? because it's more appropriate than my one...what do you think?

[barleygirl]

I'm not sure about your title . . . which I like just the way it is . . . I was commenting on whether or not to use the word "drop/s" as plural in your last line. I think "drops" sounds better than "drop".

[Priyanshi]

okaaay.... thank u for your suggestions ma'am.:))

[Najam Us Saher]

Don't know! But it's pure - "Scarlet drop of tears"
Changing the last line to the one mentioned above, it sounds better don't you think?
Rosiness of the heart is vanishing is a well written line, I liked that above all.

[Priyanshi]

yeah, it sounding better....okaay, I shall change it right now...thank u so the honest review,Najam

[Najam Us Saher]

You are most welcome.