Many A Time

Many a time you didn't come.

 Never your flaws, then did I count.

because when hopes began to fall,

all of sudden, you save them at all.

 

Many a time, blue devil belted your mind.

trailed each way, sadness from you to align.

though you never needed me, did expect the else

but my care wasn't less when the heart did melt.

 

Many a time, I wanted you,

to be in me, for me, to get a bit of hue.

When the stars weren't seen,

I wish to see the moon, for me, that was you.

 

Many a time, when I rang the blues

You forced me to smile, you got me those clues.

but today, am singing the blues,

in guilt though. But unknown flaws of whose?

Reviews

[Pragati Chaudhary]

I love the texture of this piece. It's so moist yet so beautiful. Loved it.

[Great Aunt Astri]

Such a sad poem but so well expressed (in your English which is a little bit different to mine, but of course, equally valid.) Being in love with the wrong one is such a problem, and yes, it does bring guilt. But, perhaps, if one allows oneself to experience the pain, it will go away. Love this poem.

[Priyanshi]

Thank you so much Ma'am for the lovely review
:))

[Great Aunt Astri]

You are welcome.

[BlackPrince]

I love the flow, rhymes, rhythm and refrain.

[Priyanshi]

Thank you so much for your kind words
:)

[Sikandar Khan]

Very Difficult Language Used But Understandable And Nice Narration....

[Priyanshi]

oh, next time I shall write in easy language,friend.
Thank you for the honest review

[Najam Us Saher]

Hard hitting question, you expressed your emotions really well.

[Priyanshi]

True....sometimes only words on paper can catch our emotions...Thank you so much, for the lovely reivew.:)

[Najam Us Saher]

Exactly, you are most welcome :)

[barleygirl]

This feels like a tangled up story of unclear intentions between two people . . . that never-ending push-and-pull . . . wondering what's going on & what is the other one thinking or feeling. There are a few lines I don't understand but overall, the main message is coming thru. This phrase from 2nd stanza seems unclear to me: "did expect the else" . . . (???) The 3rd stanza really shines for me -- good imagery! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Priyanshi]

"Did expect the else" actually means that the person expected someone else to help him, but in her place I did it....that's what I did mean....am sorry for clearly not giving the meaning....
Thank you so much for the honest review. :)
(((HUGS)))

[Farhan Shaikh]

Love doesn't hurt... loving the wrong one hurts...I like the poem..

[Priyanshi]

Exactly true,Farhan.
Thank you so much, for the review.:)

[Najam Us Saher]

Wrong ones lead us to the right places only if you give a chance. Trust me.

[Farhan Shaikh]

I agree...

[wordman]

singing the blues,wonder why love brings all this pain

[Priyanshi]

Yeah, true...
Thank you so much, for review,friend:)

[wordman]

no problem my friend

[Mavericks]

Very beautifully penned, Priya. They say Love is Pain. With love comes a lot of hurt and what not. But, that's what Love is. I have been there, but with times everything fades....
Cure for pain is in the pain - Rumi.

[Priyanshi]

True statement, it is.
Thank you so much, friend, for the review:)