RAGE

wearing a fragile smile,

that breaks with a pinch of taunt.

the universe of cruel soul surfaces me

since they think of me as  mild.

but the powerful  patience  heart,

is hidden from those howling souls.

that a wolf lies hidden beneath the pure cries,

which  is no less than a devil vampire.

Author's Note

Thank you, Gaurav for the title of the poem

Reviews

[Pragati Chaudhary]

I loved it. short and apt.
keep writing more dear friend

[Pooja Chintamani]

Priyanshi ur poems connect to much with my words and soul. Ur expressions r wonderful dear. Loved to read you

[Priyanshi]

Let me tell you, your review made me so much happy....THank you so much for reading my work....
read moreLet me tell you, your review made me so much happy....THank you so much for reading my work....
Thanks a lot:))

[barleygirl]

You've done a realistic job of describing "rage" . . . I like the way you bring in spooky descriptions like "howling souls" and "wolf cries" and "devil vampire" . . . RAGE can be all these things. Your words are well-chosen to convey dynamic intensity. I have lived with rage for most of my life, but it can be kept in its cage *sigh!* (((HUGS)) Fondly, Margie

[Priyanshi]

that's true, and am glad for the lovely review.....Thank you so much, friend.
:)

[Mavericks]

Kya hua Priyanshi? Are you okay?

[Priyanshi]

Perfect and fine....am okay
Keep Smiling:)

[Mavericks]

Merry Christmas! :)

[Priyanshi]

Thank you and same to you....keep smiling:)

[Zoya]

We live in a very judgemental society. The quiet ones or the ones who believe in less talking and more doing, are misunderstood. The others think that they can't speak up for themselves or they cannot form their own views and opinions. But they don't know that they have much more will power and patience and find it better to remain quiet than get involved in any kind of trivial fights or discussions. I believe they are much stronger.
A correction- change patience to patient in the fifth line.
Very nice poem. Good job!

[Priyanshi]

That's what i wanted to explain.. thank you so much Zoe... and am going to make a change you suggested.
:)

[Zoya]

Very welcome :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Strong emotions are over flowing in this poem. I really liked the way you captured the feelings.

[Priyanshi]

Thank you so much, Najam, for the kind words:)
Merry Christmas:)

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome :)

[wordman]

living in a world of male dominance and no respect

[Priyanshi]

Thank you so much, sir, for the kind words.

[R.E. Ray]

So polite and gentle on the surface, but lying beneath is a clear warning--"Don't underestimate me!" You convey and balance so well humility and strength. Nice work!

[Priyanshi]

Thank you for the honest review, sir...glad to read your words.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

Wow strong words poetic description of the self. Great wording. Thumbs up.


I'm a newbie here, pls review, comment my first poem here, wud luv to know your thoughts, I'm navigating the site looking for poem pals.

[Priyanshi]

Thnk you so much..and surely I'll read your poems.

[Gaurav]

Really a good job describing the hidden strength in each of us. Great Work. And i just took the word of the title from your suggestions only....keep writing :)

[Priyanshi]

:)
Thank you for lovely review, friend.
:)