Wanna See You Smile

Fade up and  stressful you  look;

Embroiled and entangled in a trap,

In a trap of destructive thoughts,

And that's so painful, so leave  that,

And  come out with a smile

 

Those glinting eyes lost their spark

When pain slammed on you.

Face turning into dark pale,

Coming through that,

 I wanna see you smile.

 

The phases you are passing through

Is known to me, yet I'm  helpless

Though  I wanna help you

Because I wanna see you smile

 

You stood out as an inspiration,

 for me, always there in the places

Where I needed you and still need you,

So I wanna see you smile.

 

Though a couple of times  we spent

And you became my best friend

Ah, a sweet bond of friendship exist

So, I wanna see you smile.

 

Miles of distances we carry

Still, we are great buddies

because heart are connected,

And so I wanna see you smile

 

 Your problems are known to me,

Yet no ideas to solve them

I'm feeling disgusted now,

And need  you to make me smile,

 

   I always needed you

And still, need you

And will need you

So I wanna see you smile.

Author's Note

Still, a try to bring that lost smile of someone.... hope the readers like it. I know, the poem need to be edited, but still ...I wanted to present it in the way it came from my heart. Thanks .

Reviews

[Maria]

Truly inspiring. If we would all take time, to make someone smile and forget about their troubles, for only a minute or two. More of this is needed as the world in whole, is crying out in fear and rage, as ISIS continues to plot and kill many here and there.

[Priyanshi]

Yeah, agree with you..
Thank you so much, Maria for the appreciating review...thanks once again.

[Maria]

You are very welcomed

[barleygirl]

Very touching sentiments to share with a friend. Your words are so heartfelt & sincere, I could feel the friendliness thru-out. I love the simplicity of your expressions . . . sometimes it's nice to not have things all crafted out with fancy poetic structure . . . but rather the rawness of the way true feelings can feel. I like that you mix up the last line of every stanza, rather than repeating it the same way over & over. I would, however, like to see more mixing up, perhaps by adding an adjective here & there to give this longed-for smile some personality . . . "I wanna see your lopsided smile" . . . "I can't wait to see you break into a toothy grin" . . . "The sun rises when your smile shines on me" . . . just some ideas for mixing it up in future writings (((HUGS)))

[Priyanshi]

I'm happy to hear the ideas and i must try them in any future writing for sure....thank you so much, friend, for the honest comment...i appreciate it.

[apennylate]

The phases that you are passing through... A wonderful tribute to the sincerity of a lost smile, or is it found... Nicely penned...

[Priyanshi]

Hey, tHank you so much, friend...'m glad for your kind review and visit.

[apennylate]

Aye, a pleasure... Keep at it, friend...!

[rowan.taylorrr]

aw. I really like this piece, I love the reality of this piece honestly, it's great!

[Priyanshi]

Hey, thank you so much,for your kind words and visit, xoxo.

[Pravir]

That was awesome. . . . u have a great flow with words . . . and really you have improved a lot. I liked the way you xpressed ur emotions. . keep sharing

[Priyanshi]

Thank you...that means i'm improving...thank you so much for your kind review and visit.

[pragya gaur]

Awesome one priyanshi Ji....I really loved it

[Priyanshi]

Thank you..sweet girl. 'm happy for this kind review...thanks once again.

[Farhan Shaikh]

I liked it, it is wonderful and hope it will bring smile on that Someone's ' face..

[Priyanshi]

I too hope so, Thank you Farhan, for the lovely review...thanks once again.

[Sofia]

This is so sweet and beautiful. I loved it. For me, it's one of your best poems. It's really very amazing. I'm glad I read this poem first among all the RRs. It brought a smile :) keep writing dear :)

[Priyanshi]

Oh, Your review made me smile, friends like you always encourage me to write more...glad to have friends like you .........thank you so much.

[Sofia]

You're welcome dear and even I'm glad to have you as a friend :)

[Im His Daughter]

Aww this is so awesome. A great friend you are & would be to have in life. I really like this one. It's like I can hear & see you standing in front of me, wiping my tears from today. Thank you Priyanshi.... Cheryl aka Im His Daughter

[Priyanshi]

O.M.G., My pleasure, that you loved it...glad for the kind review, thank you so much.. So I've known your name.Keep visiting.

[Im His Daughter]

Very few like unless they have read a poem with my name in it, or are on my FB know my name. :) Count yourself among them. ;)

[Priyanshi]

Okay, then, I'm the lucky one...Hurray..glad to have you as a friend.

[Joey Nizz]

Thank you very much, your poem made me smile a little :)
The world could use people like you around to make others smile, when you smile you can forget about all of the bad things going on for your head and you will feel better, even if its for a short time, at least you forgot about what was troubling you.

Thank you for sharing, this has been a really good read :)

[Priyanshi]

I'm glad that it made you smile...thank you very much, Joey , for the appreciating review...thanks once again.

[Joey Nizz]

You are most welcome :)