Why Did you do That.

You broke my heart into 100 pieces

that loved you,

that cared for you,

that worried about you,

that even stood for you.

Then why did you went away.

                           Will not my memories chase you,

                           will not my eyes cry let you,

                           will my pranks bring smile to you,

                           will not my innocence relent you,

                           Will not my sad face anxious you,

                          Then why did you left me away,

won't your ego get hurt,

won't your soul curse you,

won't you be sad longer,

won't your mind be depressed,

won't your mind dream about me

Then did you part away.

Reviews

[Raj Sahu]

Really, it's too emotional. People part from us when we are in need of them. We never expect separation of such people from our life but we can't do anything before our destiny. It is written very nicely. The repeatation is awesome. Altogether a very good work. Keep it up dear poetess. 😊😊😊

[Priyanshi]

Thank you so much Raj , for appreciating the poem and such an inspiring comment .

[Raj Sahu]

The pleasure is all mine.

[barleygirl]

Here you've written a poem of heartbreak where the narrator sounds pretty self-absorbed to me. I like your message & I feel that being brokenhearted, we are all likely to be somewhat self-absorbed. But I feel that a message of heartbreak can be written in a little more balanced way, not blaming the other person, & owning one's share of the blame for how things go in a relationship.

[Priyanshi]

hmm, yeah, that's a point, why haven't I thought about that?....But i must remember this in my next such poems...hahaha.Thank you so much, friend, for the honest review and visit.

[barleygirl]

My comments are only meant to be ideas to take into your next writing session! This poem is fine the way it is!

[Priyanshi]

Thank you friend.

[Prashant Bajpai]

in this there is no correction needed as the words are simple but they are speaking. i am going through the same phase and it really blessing for me that i read it !!! thankiew so much for writing this .....

[Priyanshi]

Oh ! Thank you so much, Prashant....thanks for the appreciation ....hope you're fine.

[Wajiha Nayeem]

this is such a touching poem....and this so true and natural...great work priyanshi!

[Priyanshi]

Thank you so much Wajiha... It feels good when someone is able to relate with it.... Once again thank you for your sweet words.

[Wajiha Nayeem]

my pleasure dear one!!

[Surya]

That just left me in tears...I could realte to it well....Thank you Priyanshi for sharing...:)

[Priyanshi]

Thank you so much Surya, for such beautiful review.... and enjoying it.