Visiting Threats

A common routine.

A threat

An insouciant warning

creeping through my veins

setting my heart thudding,

my ears ringing.

Nausea at the pit of my stomach

swirling its way up

a glut of human sediments

forces against my throat.

Let it go. LET IT GO!

But I gulp it down

It tremors down furiously

slipping into my heart this time

And I get back to living.

Reviews

[Sleeping Maiden]

Huh, very interesting. I like it. Nice descriptions and imagery. You create a sense of panic it seems through the experience... very interesting..
Nice write. It kinda reminds me of like having a premonition or some kind of psychic touch... to something.

[Writer #00]

Oh my. I hope this becomes a less frequent routine--maybe even a vestige of the past--because the way you described these moments of unease are so vivid and haunting that just reading about it makes me begin to feel a brief, miniature version of it. It seems as if this panic is first expressed through a painful physicality (nausea and that which is associated) before you decide to"gulp it [the feeling] down" and it refuses to die away, "slipping into [your] heart this time"...as a subconscious residue of these moments that cling to the insides of you even when you collect yourself enough to "get back to living". I can't say I haven't felt similarly, too, and I thank you for sharing this as it brought these moments to a place of awareness within me.

The images you portray through this poem: crisp and clear.

*^*b/100

[Vrushali]

It's that rising pressure in a volcano that reaches the apex and-just like that-dies down. Sometimes, it needn't.

[Priyanka Natesh]

Sometimes, it needn't :)

[Amila Jay]

Kind of have it too ... Awesome write:))

[Nino James P. Cuestas]

this is interesting! It shows the fall of the person but he/she managed to go up.

[K.C. Zbryk]

You capture rising anic so very clearly in this piece it is almost as if one is reliving the experience when reading this. I think this is a very well composed piece and in its brevity it captures an amazing amount of energy and emotion. Great job sir!

[Buddhistboy73]

Interesting....sounds like a panic attack to me....great visuals here...and I can totally relate...love the line "an insouciant warning"....Let it go indeed.....and the final line is when I feel the calm again.....just like you I would imagine....thanks for sharing....BB

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thought provoking, a silence that grates the matters to which we all live, well done, good read.

[Sujash I. Purna]

It says what it's supposed to say! An immensely turbulent froth upon an apparently genteel cup of tea...
Mind's eye is aflame with the glow but what-others-would-think complex is all with the reign...

Pithy and a nice work, Priyanka!

[AK]

Awesome poem!