Pessimist

Here is the narration of a man just deprieved of every hope and love of this nasty world....I HOPE YOU'LL LIKE IT.

The endless, barren life is vain.
Shorn off hope and all disdain.

Only can I hear the solitary voice:
"No reason with you to rejoice!".

My luck pretends never to shine.
"Where will lead the destiny mine!".

The incredulous world to my thought ever,
enlisted my mind in the eccentric fewer.

In the world renounced none to criticize.
Even the upcoming hell not to me a surprise.

The brief statement I only insist:
"No sight is worse than pessimist".

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Pritesh,
Short poems should never be apologised for. It is more difficult to capture emotion and vision in them. You have done a great job here in a lovely poem with good meter and metaphor. You are young you will get over such set backs enjoy life and don't be a victim be a vixen!

[Pritesh]

thanks!

[Jasmine Thurber]

Good poem.I think you did great, I bet you will do a lot better on the next poem you make.hope you have fun writing another phone!a!

[Pritesh]

thanks!

[satish sharma]

this good poem pritesh it is state of mind which showes in poem

[Allen Smuckler]

A pessimist is certainly negativity personified…
but the worst??? well, maybe. Certainly to you .. at this time….
You are right however Pritesh… a man who continually gives off bad vibes, loses all hope, and pontificates all that is wrong with the world and his station in it…is not a cat you want to hang out with. No one likes a constant complainer…but we all get in that mood from time to time.
You did a great job expressing that feeling…and your cadence and rhyme scheme were spot on.
I enjoyed the read.
good job Pritesh
allen

[falling_toxic_rain]

this is good, I like it so.nice write,
-rain

[Barbara Walker]

You nail it on the head with your words. i like the way you convey your intent.

[Baby Ricochet]

There's been times I felt that way. Great write Pritesh.

[Pritesh]

thanks

[Carolann Dowsett]

Sometimes its hard in life to be an optimist when so many things around you seem to fall apart and there seems to be no hope you have capture this emotion well here. Nicely written.

[Pritesh]

thanks for the kind review

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome :)

[AYVID N]

Disillusionment happens. You have written a great poem out of it. I liked it a lot.

[Pritesh]

thanks for ur kind review

[Inda]

Awesome rhythm and the last two lines really brings us down into a soft landing. Great write!

[Pritesh]

thanks for the kind review...

[Inda]

no prob!

[Salar Majak]

"The luck pretends never to shine,
where will lead the destiny mine.''

i love these lines, they are full of it!, i don't know what 'it' is but i can feel it
sorry if i don't make any sence at all XD
great poem, with great emotions, keep up!

[Pritesh]

thanks for the kind review! And for 'it' haha...:-D

[Salar Majak]

:D you are welcome

[j]

Its A Very "Dark" Poem That Has A Lot Of Meaning And Depth To It, And Even Though Its Short, It Flows Really Well. The Way You Expressed Emotion Using Few Words Is Quite Amazing, As Well.