Pessimist

Here is the narration of a man just deprieved of every hope and love of this nasty world....I HOPE YOU'LL LIKE IT.

The endless, barren life is vain.
Shorn off hope and all disdain.

Only can I hear the solitary voice:
"No reason with you to rejoice!".

My luck pretends never to shine.
"Where will lead the destiny mine!".

The incredulous world to my thought ever,
enlisted my mind in the eccentric fewer.

In the world renounced none to criticize.
Even the upcoming hell not to me a surprise.

The brief statement I only insist:
"No sight is worse than pessimist".

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Pritesh,
Short poems should never be apologised for. It is more difficult to capture emotion and vision in them. You have done a great job here in a lovely poem with good meter and metaphor. You are young you will get over such set backs enjoy life and don't be a victim be a vixen!

[Pritesh]

thanks!

[Jasmine Thurber]

Good poem.I think you did great, I bet you will do a lot better on the next poem you make.hope you have fun writing another phone!a!

[Pritesh]

thanks!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

what a classic, enjoyed greatly.

[Laura Maidah]

I like the inversion of traditional sentence verb structure. Your clauses are quite delicious to pronounce. I found the rhyme consistent. Meter is solid. Overall, superb.

[Southern Cross]

One thing you can say about a pessimist is that they can never suffer from being disappointed anew as they remain in a constant sate of negativity. To never expect happiness to occur, leaves you without pain when it doesn't happen . I liked the flow of the content and rhyme scheme.

[Pritesh]

thanks for the revieww

[Xerclipse]

the ryhme works really well. Its pretty effective and nicely structured

[Zombie Waffle]

Great =)

I love the rhyme-scheme you used here, very effective.

[AK]

Nice poem! I loved the way it flows. Great job. Keep writing!

[外人 (Gaiji..]

wow, very well done, great flow, original use of couplets and an interesting choice of using a high level lexic :)

[RachelReaper]

I like the structure of the poem and that you could make it rhyme and coherent. Very good write!