Once upon a time

Once upon a time

A Poem by Pritesh
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Its an attempt to take you throughtout the satirical journey of our dear dwelling earth and that of us humans.

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Once upon a time,
a ray of hope shine.
A weird creature evolve,
on planet which revolve.
The planet which was bare,
where even survival was dare.
On everything was lone,
was not now alone.
The civilizations spread entire,
the resources they took hire.
It was like a endless debt,
for which planet hoped and wait.
All it was over to exhilarate,
but it was time to desolate.
The treasure got ruin,
and exhaustion was very soon.
The creature which spread hate,
was on verge of facing fate.
Who started as a caveman,
we now call it as a human.

© 2012 Pritesh


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i feel more that every age brings and carries upon itself the extinction of its very characteristics! Humankind is just an attribute to the past 120+million years that our species have surfaced!
i wonder what will come in follow!
but worry not!
nature has its way in control itself! anything we do to better our consumption and devise of the world around us, is only a mere prolonging of our existence!
like all species, i'm sure ours will either evolve, or go extinct!
what a shame it is how we made this haven a living hell, but rest assured, our earth will recover, with or without us, and time will tell!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pritesh

12 Years Ago

I really can find your concern with the nature and the looming anxiety on entire mankind...its certa.. read more



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Greatly done

Posted 12 Years Ago


Greatly done

Posted 12 Years Ago


I found myself reading every word a lot more carefully, because when we are too familiar with a language we get boring and afraid to break the 'rules'. Then, when we see language in its purest form, we're like... woooaaaaa, i never knew it sounded like that. Felt like that. And... makes perfect sense!

Astounding voice. May the wit of satire shine forever through thee-:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


A big topic such as this is sometimes hard to put to life in a poem, but you really pulled it off! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Amazing poem. I like the flow of words and the happening in the poem. This is a outstanding poem. Rating 100/100
- honestly
Roxast

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is really cool! Very different. Awesome write. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago



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