We Were Human

 

“We were human”

No one was sure

Why the rather odd

Solitary man

Would choose to leave

His world of shadows

Birdfeeders

And newspapers

In such an odd way

And why “we”?

There was never a “we”

That we were aware of

Could it be

A reminder or sorts

But for whom?

No one ever visited

Unlikely

They’ll start now

 

“We were human”

 

Etched in stone

Where he lays

Today

Tomorrow

And forever

Alone

- T.G. Friel

Reviews

[armadillo]

I think this is really excellent. I think if you separated out the last three lines of the first stanza into a new individual stanza that would be extremely strong. I read the poem three times and when I read it aloud in that way it was REALLy effective. Also i do not think i would say 'highly unlikely' - it does not quite fit right with the strength of the rest of the poem- I would just say unlikely or find another way to say it- feels like it should not have to be stressed with the 'highly'.

BECAUSE of the simplicity of the statements, this is VERY strong. Nice one.

[Skelasoldier]

Interresting free form and a very good story that this poem portrays, keep up the good work