A Lost Lamb

I was inspired for this one by the bible story of Judas and the tale of The Last Supper... enjoy :)

A Lost Lamb  

The sounds of low

Voices and stirring movement

In this small place seem to echo

And I long to repent

 

I cannot sit still

His eyes scream he knows

So loud it make me ill

He breaks the bread, the wine flows

In his memory, we have our fill

 

In a dark corner, I drop to my knee

The sounds of his words, “I say unto you,

That one of you shall betray me…”

Sear my mind; my wits are few

 

In dreaded fear eleven ask,

“Lord, is it I?”

I long to wear a mask

I long to die,

For it is now my turn to ask

 

Without malice and with a look so serene

He answers, “Thou, hast said,” and his eyes become silent

Now it is my eyes that scream

And I pray the Father will be as lenient

Reviews

[Damian Alan Gray]

I am no longer Christian, but this decision came at a long length of study into the religion. However, I have to say that Judas takes a bad rap for the betrayal of Jesus. If not for him, the Passion never would have happened and Jesus would not have died for the sins of mankind. In a way, Judas did the world a favor.
This said, I thought the insight you offered toward the guilt Judas felt for the betrayal was a tremendous display of your poetic ability. Nicely written.

[Stephanie]

Wow, I never thought to write something from Judas's point of view. That was clever and kept my interest even though I'm not very religious. Great write :)

[dougspoetry]

Very well written poem, The imagery and flow were very well executed. The story of the last supper never grows old. You have done a good job of conveying how we all feel sometimes when we blow it. Thank God for His grace and mercy. Keep up the great work.

God Bless!

[Phill Oz O'fee]

You have creatively captured the troubled mind of Judas in poetic poignancy. Practically all Christians, whether laity, clergy, or theologians, still consider Judas to be a conspirator. Even the term 'Judas' has emerged in many languages as a synonym for betrayer. However, some academics have presented alternative theories, suggesting Judas was merely the negotiator in a prearranged prisoner exchange, that gave Jesus to the Roman authorities, by mutual agreement. It has also been proposed, Judas acted with Jesus' knowledge and consent, to ensure the re-enactment of Biblical prophecy. And, his later portrayal as "traitor" was a historical distortion of the real Judas' true motive.

Any write that makes you think is a sign of a talented pen. Excellent work!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[Poiesis]

Great subject, great style, and great flow. Good job :-)

[Not Afraid of Bruises]

After a difficult situation in my youth I gave up on my religion. Thankfully I have moved on past this, but I still feel insecure in my faith... to put it simply, your poem touched me. My only suggestion is for you to let it sit for a week or so, then read it through once or twice - a few areas have shaking flow.

other than that, it was a great piece. Thank you for sharing, and best of luck

[L.G. Knight]

Nicely Done... Don't believe I have ever seen anything written in judas' point of veiw before very intrigueing and very well done! thanks for entering it in my sleepless night contest...

~Frances~

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

This is a very unique poem.... not many dare to write in Judas' point of view... This is very well done... you can feel the emotions in this one... Great Job!

[Krishna]

The one is pretty authentic, I like how it's a story summarized so shortly that its emotional without really knowing why, as if our brain 'fills in the blanks', very arousing in a literary sense. I'm going to give it a 90, if that's okay with you...

[The Autumn Faerie]

Very nice.
I really, really liked this.
It was very well written.
Good work!