1 - Phone calls

BOLD = Messages

Italics = Phone Calls

 

Pitch black, with the faded light emguring from the little gab in the middle. Eh, It was morning. I moaned. I swung out of the single bed and found my trousers. Black, slighty faded, i put them on. They were super skinney, which were a little too tight for me, Pulling them up i noticed a lump in the back of my trousers. Once they were on i pulled this item out. Oh s**t, my phone. I unlocked it. Ten messages and 20 missed calls, S**t. I read the first coulpe of messages to get a drift of what was going on.

 

'Where are you? AGAIN!"

"Hello sweetheart how it going? missing your family?"

"MIDNIGHT!"

"Midnight, sweetheart, everyone is pissed you call me straight as you can, I mean it, where the f**k did you go last night. HUH?"

 

I sighed they were all the same. I repelied to my mother first. "Heya mum, no i haven't i'll be round to see you on christmas; Can Thorne come?" . God she was so needy.

 

I decided that i would have to call Thorne. I pressed dial. Ring Ring Ring

Midnight. I want you to explain where the f**k did you go last night.

Thorne babe, just chill i went to see my mother, i stayed in a little motel, whats the time?

Your mum, huh? You hate the b***h, even when your high, don't lie and its like 4 in the afternoon.

F**k that late? and yerh i did. I got a text from her, i must of ran over here or something because i'm in St Mary's Island.

DUDE, Your there!

Yerh I know.

That a little bit far from london. What the F**k. Charlie is gonna kill you. You took all the weed.. You better have it.

Ah S**t, I started to look around. I pulled up the cover, in the cover. THE PILLOW CASE. Of course

Midnight!?

Sorry Sorry Yerh i have, I hid it in the pillow case, chill man, i got the lot. -Mental sigh-

So when you coming up for band pratice. How much money you go on?

Checking in the place bleach wooden draw next to me i had everthing in there. Phew.

Erm i got like 100 in notes and i have my card.

Okay don't use your card.

Why?

we might have been checked because Storm thought that he could get a police officer to fight him.

OH What the f**k? Where are you then?

I'm fine, I need you to check if your clean, get up to our flat, give weed to charlie and bail out Storm.

Really?

YES you, just because you fucked off to your mums.

Yerh i'll be home in like an hour.

Good girl. bye.

The phone went dead. This room was s**t. I opened the curtains. Ah man, I was in a place called Worthing. Ah F**K.. I didn't even look at the room. I opened the door, grabbing my phone, weed, cash and the door key and ran downstairs.

 

"Morning can i help you" The cheery women at the desk made me want to vommit. Too happy.

"Yerh, I wanna give back the keys?" I handed them over. she smilied.

"Lets see, hmm it says here you booked it for two weeks, you going have to pay for that unfornately" I glared at her. Really. I should be getting on a train.

"Sorry but i do not have the cash, i stayed for one night yerh? well can i pay for one night?!" I kind of screamed. At the bloody Premier Inn, charing me alot of money i could tell. I didn't have the time to do this, and i was on a bloody budget.

"That will be 81 pounds please" I glared right into her eyes.

"What? I can't afford that!" I was jumping up and down in a pissed off trance.

"Okay, i will say that you orginally wanted the cheapest deal" She was typing quick and she rarly looked up "Okay that wil be 23 pounds" I handed over the money and recieved the change.

 

"Thanks sorry. bye" I rushed out. I was in the middle of the town centre. Great, my phone was vibrating. I picked up.

Hello?

Midnight?

Yerh what Storm

Hey babe, anyway you can bail me out with your card.

I was gonna....

then destroy it?

No storm, i'm gonna use some elses card .

Whos?

I don't bloody know. Oh wait someone called; Taylor strange a*s first na...

Oh f*****g sucks, you have until like 6 to get me out and you better hurry! I don't wanna be stuck here till tomorrow. I'm with a bunch of f*****g rapists.

Ha unlucky. Serves you right. Dick

Yerh just f*****g get here in time, or Thorne will do you in and you know it.

The phone cut off,  Great. I knew this town anyway, been here loads of time when i was a kid.

 

My phone vibrated again, but just once, a text.. from mum. Joy. It read "Of course not sweetheart, he does drugs and i don't want him near your brothers and sisters they are only 5, Please maybe when they have gone to James house on boxing day. I'll have to think about it, but i think you know the answer anyway". B***h, I was bloody on drugs and she doesn't seem to care.

 

I then noticed the time on my phone 4.20pm, i realised i had less than two hours and pegged it too get to the train station.

 

When i reached the desk no-else was arround. "Hello how can i help you?" The fat old man behind the desk was one that was to be expected, i mean you could just tell. He was bold and looked like he smoked. F*g. He properly live with his mum.

"I need a ticket for the quickest train London as soon as" I spat at him. I had no time.

"Sure, that's twenty pounds" I handed a twenty over and started to get bored as i waited for my tickets to actually print. "Here you go madame" was he trying to flirt yerh properly. "You need platfrom 2 and there is one leaving in about 3 minutes" S**T. I literally grabbed the ticket off of him and ran over the graffiti bridge and down the two flight of stairs, and just as the doors were closing, i sandwich myself in. Nicely done.

Reviews

[*Evelen*]

This is a great story so far:) love the character Midnight. Thanks for sharing.
~*Evelen*~

[Inyourshadow]

A very ' Skins ' feel to this piece, drugs violence and vulgar language, love it. I almost expected Frank Gallager to wonder out of the bathroom with the stash. You put alot of effort time and energy into this it seems using great imagery and emotions, the errors were unnoticed first time read as I was more interested in the story than the spelling. Keep em' coming

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Some spelling errors but no problem on those, the beginning was a bit confusing, i'd suggest using color maybe ? to highlight the different people talking or maybe alternate between bold and italic with the different people speaking and then let the rest be in color maybe ? or space it out more, to be less confusing... other then that i liked this, the ending especially, i liked how you wrote it, it's different. :)

[Daytonight]

Really interesting story so far! Grammatical errors were easy to overlook, those are no problem to fix. The story line kept you involved. Keep on penning.

[Maimai]

Loving it so far LouLou :)
St Mary's Island ;P

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Love it so far, loving the Brit references ' Premier Inn'.

Can't wait for more:)

[J. Ghalden]

I think the story is good, but the speaking confused me. I couldn't exactly figure out if the italics were aloud at the beginning, or if she was thinking. xD I kinda just guessed.
Grammar problems, but easily fixable.
Keep it up! :D