Ball

Mystery, magic, a poem that I literally just thought up 😅

I wonder how long you've haunted my dreams
I've lost count really
Yes you with the long pale limbs and scarlet lips
You with the short curled hair, like rolling cloud
You with the dress of silk and voice of satin
You the enigma of my being

The party is dull until I laid my eyes on you
Your hypnotising grey eyes,
Full of cold mystery.
How could I resist, my fates fleeting call
I need you,
To dance with me in this ball

Author's Note

Please do offer any criticism, but please mr it constructive

Reviews

[M P Ramesh]

julietta,

When experience matters it should come from within with real rhythm. The changes a writer can make is beyond that many times. you may be experiencing the hot.......vibrant ....pulls when created it ..excellent decision to share with readers ....actually work gets its completion in a reader only...real reader...then the work is not of writers... but of all


carry on.........


M P ramesh

[Chidoriflower]

This is majestic, haunting, and beautiful. It also kind of reminds me of Evanescence, or something like that. I really like how simplistically pretty it is, and it's structure. 100/100 Thank you for sharing

[Chidoriflower]

i vill crush your dick beneath ma boot like a frail flower

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the poem. I liked the gentle tone and the hope at the ending. It is written well and it told a story. Thank you Princess Julietta for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote