Who Is This?

Who is this I see in the mirror

  Looking back at me?
    Could it be?
      Barely recognisable as someone to love.

      A face ravaged by sadness
    Love withdrawn
  Aged with disappointment
All lines telling their story

Mouth down turned with sorrow
  Past hurts buried
    In the line of a frown
      Etched indelibly 

      Tear streaked cheeks
    Shining with pain
  Loneliness and surrender
Of the inevitable solitude

But beyond the eyes
  Into the soul
    Burning fires of love shine
      Begging for release

      So free the passion
    And the pain
  Love me
Make me whole again!

Reviews

[Miaishia McKenzie]

I love the form you wrote this in. I learned something. It drew me in just by the way you presented it. I understood your emotion and the form really helped me feel it. I really love this piece!

But beyond the eyes Into the soul Burning fires of love shine Begging for release

This is my favorite part making reference that you are not only whats on the outside if you one looked deep they would see your soul crying for release! two snaps girl I love this

[Fiona C]

Thank you so much for your lovely comments Miaishia. This was one of my very first poems that I wrote so appreciate your reading it. x

[icelandicblue]

The furnace may show its wear but the fire inside burns bright. Your poem is highly descriptive and you paint a picture so that the reader is able to look into the mirror too.

[Fiona C]

Thank you for reading and commenting. I really do appreciate it x

[Diana]

I feel this. I like how in spite of all the loneliness your soul is "burning" with love. Embrace that. Well-penned.

[Fiona C]

Thank you Diana. Even through all the pain, I am never giving up on life and love. Thank you for reading and your review. Take care x

[Angel]

I learned something, back when I was in a place similar to this...
It was a lesson that cost me dearly...but I pass it along to you for free.

Don't wait for someone else to bring you flowers...get up and go plant your own garden...

[Fiona C]

Thank you Angel. This was penned when I was going through a very low time and I have since picked myself up, dusted myself off and got on with living again. Thank you for taking the time and interest to share your wisdom. It is greatly appreciated. Have a wonderful day x

[Angel]

You're quite welcome...

[Rita L. Sev]

Wonderful flow and form in this piece. Great write, bringing emotion without being overbearing. :)

[Fiona C]

Thank you Rita, for your lovely comment x

[Baby Ricochet]

Sad poem. Good emotional feel. Thank you

[Fiona C]

Thank you for reading and your review. Much appreciated x

[Vidya Bacchus]

this poem is sad and your pain is almost blinding,i am sorry if you felt this way but your emotions put into words are very wonderfully written

[Fiona C]

It was written during a very bad time but happy to say that it has passed. Thank you x

[Vidya Bacchus]

well that is great to know keep at it.

[Justsimplyjulia]

I've been meaning to write a poem about this topic, never got around to it. Mind me, you used the ida wonderfully! I love this piece!
-Dragon

[Fiona C]

Thank you for the read and the comment. Really appreciated x

[Sami Khalil]

A very sad but with the power of release of hurt and pain. I hope things work out for the better...Look on the bright side...:).............................

[Fiona C]

Thank you for reading and your comment. I wrote this a couple of months ago and am in a better place now x

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Good to know...You are welcome...:)...........

[Pryde Foltz]

Lovely poem, but you need no one else to make you whole, maybe just less lonely; I hear that. Great word choice and flow and the formatting is beautiful. Keep penning; you do it well.

[Fiona C]

Thank you so much for your positive comments and for reading. x

[Dr. Wood ?]

you sound like a lost soul Jack...well written sir

[Fiona C]

Thank you so much and Jack says to tell you he is not this good! :-) lol x

[Dr. Wood ?]

Aha.....Caught out......Between you and I...you could be ri........He aint listening is he?

[Fiona C]

i am pretty sure he will be reading this as we speak! :-)

[Dr. Wood ?]

Sorry jack my old and faithful friend...just joshing...you know me..my old mate and mucker...I didnt' mean it....I am always joking, you know that.....PHEW......That should do it

[Fiona C]

I am sure he will be suitably appeased with that come back! :-)

[Dr. Wood ?]

he knows I am a joker, serious stuff doesn't suit me.......Great poem

[Fiona C]

He said you had a great sense of humour and I can see that! :-) Thank you x I look forward to reading your words

[Dr. Wood ?]

thanks....hope you get a smile