Alone In The Rain

How I feel without the love of my life.

Once again,
I can't sleep,
and it's because of you.
I close my eyes
just to think of you.
If I do by chance fall asleep,
I'll just dream about you.
If only we could be together in dreams.
I'd stay asleep forever.
So instead I'm just lying here
listening to the rain poor down.
The rain is sounding
like my falling tears.
I start to remember how we used to
dance in the rain;
how you would hold me close
and tell me I'd be okay.
I just want to hurt myself
because I don't have you.
You used to make me so happy.
Why did you have to go so soon?
I still love you.
I still need you.
Please come back to me.
You left me feeling so lonely
and now I'm dancing in the rain
all alone.

Reviews

[Shannon Carinne Sparks]

I've had moments like this. It's like the rain is your tears and it never ends.

[~angelalala~]

i like this one. very descriptive & good imagery. the reader can feel your heart-break & loss. "You left me feeling so lonely and now I'm dancing in the rain all alone." my favorite lines. deep, dark & sad poem. wonderfully written.

[Egan]

I understand how this feels for i am feeling this as of now. A wonderful write...this is great

[Catastrophe]

Nicely written, i could see images playing in my head
and that's a beautiful thing when it comes to reading poetry

"So instead I'm just lying here
listening to the rain poor down.
The rain is sounding
like my falling tears."

those are my favourite lines in your poem; i guess because they make the rain stand out like something else, not just "rain". The rain is a reflection of your tears and that says a lot. it makes me feel sad, but its a beautiful poem; knowing that many people can relate to feeling alone once the one they love has gone.
And i love the question "Why did you have to go so soon?" you did not let us know how this person left, has he/she died? have they just decided to leave? its a mystery to the readers, but that's the best thing about it; making us wonder. Great write

[Last Lying Look]

Very good poem. I know how that is.
I wrote a poem like that earlier today.
Great work! :D

[Lyrical Love]

Wow...powerful! Packed full of emotions, though mainly sorrow. This was pretty good.
thanks, Lyrical