That's How I Know I'm Alive

Hammers fall on my dreams,

Demolishing them, destroying them.

There is nothing I can do anymore,

My heart is aching, it feels so sore.

The knives tear into my hopes,

My soul cries tears of blood.

The ropes around my mind tighten,

I scream ‘cause there’s no use in fighting.

My voice scatters in the sky,

But nobody who hears me cry.

Breaking down all the walls,

With just my bleeding hands.

Perseverance is my only friend,

She remains while Bliss is gone.

I try so hard and see a light,

Is everything going to be alright?

I feel the warmth of love nearby,

But the darkness makes me blind.

In all this mess it’s hard to survive,
But at least I know that I'm alive.

Author's Note

My own little test; writing something dark. Did I pass?

Reviews

[TheMizFit]

Awesome! I like it.
Very dark, it is. Yes, yes, you passed!

[Thea Fuentebella]

wicked!

[Sherbs Dreaming Tree Of..]

From a Very dark writer
You f***ng nailed it :)

[Moflo]

I think you passed, very dark piece. I liked your descriptions a lot, your first line was great, very vivid imagery. I like the feeling of helplessness in this piece, I think you executed it well. The fact that you start to rhyme your lines at the end is interesting, makes me wonder if you're suggesting that everything is clearer and familiar when you're at your worst...if so, great job!