The arranged love

This is a great story! It's rare to see such a short story which includes so much information & intensity of feeling. It's the perfect short length for people who often don't want to read longer pieces on websites like these. I was very much immersed in your story from start to finish & the ending took me by surprise -- everything was going so happily, I didn't think this would take a bad turn. The ending is very brief, yet it's clear what the problem is -- some old girlfriend is now a neighbor -- this is very well done to just leave it that way, leave it to the reader's imagination to wonder how complicated this is going to be, going forward. I would be remiss if I didn't mention that the structure of your English is a little bumpy, but everything is understandable, if not perfect. Please keep practicing, you will get better at this. The important thing is good storytelling, as you have done here, & polishing up your English will happen as you continue to read & practice writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago