As the sun faded off

Tried my hands in poetry. :/

She woke up with the morning light.

She took a look from window

Its eight and people were all over the streets.

She has to start her day

But she won’t forget what had happened yesterday.

She touched the marks on her face

They were dark red.

She didn't want to see them again

But she’s afraid that once more they will reign.

Before they could heal,

She prepared herself for one tighter slap.

She had to face people in morning and to hide herself at the corner of the house,

as the sun faded off .

She packed up her things to begin with

But her ears were sensing his footsteps,

That was about to come,

As the sun faded off ……

 

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"as the sun faded off .
She packed up her things to begin with
But her ears were sensing his footsteps,
That was about to come,
As the sun faded off ……"
A vey nice poem. I like the ending the most . Thank you for penning...:)

[writer in trial]

Thanks Sami :)
I am glad that you liked it. :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[OBWhiteHawk]

Nicely done! It's good to see a poem from you. A very sad poem about abuse and the pain it causes.

[writer in trial]

Thanks a lot dear :)

[Kyle J. Lawson]

This is quite interesting. I'm not exactly sure what it was about. But it does toy with your emotions. But which emotions? Good work.

[writer in trial]

Thanks dear :)
Its about a girl who is beaten by her husband. :(

[Kyle J. Lawson]

That's what i thought at first. Then I went back and read it a few times, getting something different out of it. But now I know. :D

[writer in trial]

so what you thought at first?? i am curious to know now :D

[writer in trial]

once i woke up in morning and i wasn't feeling good somehow. This one came to my ind and i wrote it :)

[writer in trial]

sorry "mind"

[Kyle J. Lawson]

What I thought at first is that it was about a girl being beaten. But I wasn't sure.

[writer in trial]

you were right :)

[smilempsn]

Your first poem...made a lot of scene..emotions..
nicely written :)

[writer in trial]

Thanks a lot :)

[Samuel Jack]

oh man, thats such a chilling poem, i feel like protecting the Girl but im powerless, i just have to watch. good emotional piece, its a single persons story and yet it is the story of many as well. nice work.

[writer in trial]

thanks a lot friend :)
I wrote it today morning only. Don't know but something was making me sad and thoughtful, so it came out like this :). I am glad that you felt it to the core :)

[Traci]

A very sad write, full of emotion. Another well penned poem.

[writer in trial]

Thanks a lot dear :)
muaah :D