Moving On

This is just a song I wrote when I was feeling sad because someone close to me left me. I hope you enjoy. :)

I stand by the shore

The place where we became more

The craze which became a door

For me to move on

Now I stand here

Remembering the mere

Clenching my fists

Rolls down a tear

Trying to head over

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Another heartbreaking little poem. Short but so filled with meaning.
I'm sorry for this heartbreak you seem to have gone through, and I hope all is good with you now.
This was a really deep and emotion filled poem.
I enjoyed reading this. Keep writing :)

[Polly]

Thank you so much, once again, Cimmy! :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Your most welcome once again, Polly :)

[Surabhi Kaushik]

Wowo! I love the first 2 lines. Amazing to say so much in such few words

[Polly]

Thank you! :)

[sinNsincerity]

Break off the hinges of the door

[Polly]

That door is locked and can't be broken. D; But thanks for the suggestion, haha. ;)

[Stella Armour]

i can read these as song lyrics, was trying to sing them rather than read like a poem and it worked..well done

[Polly]

Thank you for your kind words!

[V]

I could feel the loss in your poem and sadness yet it also provides a notion of strength and positivity as I see in "moving on".

[Polly]

Haha, thank you. I try to be optimistic.

[V]

That's a good trait. You're welcome.

[Tony]

Yea, add a little guitar 🎸
Clench your fists and let the song flow ♫ 👍

[Polly]

Yes, I was thinking of adding more to this, but nothing came to mind, haha. xD

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Strong feeling and imagery; you've expressed yourself well!

[Polly]

Thank you so much for your kind words, Cyprian! :D

[Gee]

Hi Polly. To me, could well be wrong, you seem to be more focused on the rhyme rather than making sense of what is written. Being a second language to you it must be difficult, and I take my hat off to you for having the balls to write and post. We all are constantly striving to improve, and one good way is to read the writings of like minded poets. Hope this helps, good luck

[Polly]

Thank you, Gee. I indeed was focused on rhyming the words, I don't write a lot of poems, but I had fun writing this. Thanks for the review! :)

[Robert Haigh]

The sadness is palpable in this poem. Nicely expressed.

[Polly]

Thank you, Robert. I'm glad you like this. :)