Danger's of Stranger's 2

Part 2

After a week of almost being kidnapped, I thought it would be safe now that there were no sign of the bad people, so I decided to head down to my friend, who is a Junior, Sara’s house. Her family is from Japan, but she was adopted here in the US.

   Her mom is the Japanese teacher at our school and I’m basically heading over to her house for help on the Japanese test in three days.

   I knock on the door and Sara opens it, letting me in. Sara has long dark purple hair put up in a ponytail, amethyst eyes and peach pale skin. She is wearing a white shirt, dark purple skirt and knee high white socks. Due to her family being Japanese, her shoes are kept by the door, but she is wearing red slippers.

   We go up into her room, get out our Japanese homework and begin practicing.

     “Okay. Let’s start with the easy stuff.” Sara said. “What’s, “good afternoon”?”

     “Uhh… “konbanwa”?” I reply.

     “No, “konbanwa” is “good evening”. “Konnichiwa” is “good afternoon”.” Sara corrected.

     “Oh…sorry, it’s just so new to me.” I said.

     “It’s hard for everyone at first, but you’ll get used to it.” Sara said. “Next let’s try, “good morning”, informal. That one should be a little easier."

     “Uhh…okay…ummm… “O-Ohayou”?” I say hopping I'm right.

     “Yep! Great job!” Sara said.

     “Really? That was right? Yay!” I cheered.

   We continue to practice, Sara’s mom leaving to get some food at the super market, leaving the two of us alone. Soon there was a knock at the door.

     “I’ll see who it is.” Sara said. When she opened the door, she suddenly screamed.

     “S-Sara?!” I called. I walked down stairs to see what happened only to come face to face with the people that almost kidnapped me a week ago.

     “You're here too? Ha! That just makes our day even better!” The woman with pink hair said. “Go get her too boy’s.”

   My eyes widen and I find myself dashing up the stairs into Sara’s bedroom, about to climb out the window.

     “She isn’t getting away this time.” One of the men said. I’m suddenly grabbed around the waist and pinned to the floor.

     “L-let me go!” I beg.

     “No fat chance.” The man pinning me said. I struggled to break free, only to get my hands and legs tied. I was picked up bridle style and taken down stairs.

   Once we were down stairs, I saw Sara sleeping and being taken out the door.

     “W-what do you want with us?!” I ask.

   They ignore my question and instead, place a white cloth over my mouth. There’s a tingling feeling and then I begin to black out……but first…I…here one…of the kid…nappers……say, “The boss’ll be so pleased with these two!”

Author's Note

Conecting this story and "Stranger Danger!" together for the book.

Reviews

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This is better written than the first, I believe you're writing is improving with every piece you make. I admire the style in the ending you had put, that is way to connect the reader into the character's perspective, bringing the character to life as I stated before. The suspense is also reeling which is good for a story with intended sequels.

I can only say to add more details to make the story more colorful and watch for grammar/spelling. Then you will have a masterpiece of writing.