Chapter 1: Coming Home

"Can't you just pretend to be happy Ally?" Asked her mother.
"Why? My parents are leaving me to stay with a crazy old lady for three weeks." Answered Ally.
"Please don't be upset Ally." Asked her father.
"Hmm... let's think..." sassed Ally. "Your going on a cruise for three weeks while I sleep in an insane asylum."
"Do not talk about your grandmother that way!" Yelled her father. "She's just getting old! So cut out the attitude. You know that we can't take you on this cruise. The rules state: no-one under 21. And this is a business trip."
"Whatever." Replied Ally.
Ally looked out the window hoping to find something to entertain her bored teen mind. Instead she was shocked to find a creepy graveyard.
"Great." Ally thought. "Now I'm staying at a haunted, old, asylum."
"We're here." Hey father announced as they pulled into the long driveway.
"At least let there be cell service." Ally prayed as her father opened the car door.

Author's Note

Please give me good criticism. I want to know if my thoughts in this book should continue. Thank you!

Reviews

[Will Neill]

short chapter but good dialogue.
will

[maria ( rose)]

yes, most definitely ! enjoying what I am reading so far. Your story is holding my attention and looking forward to reading more..Good Luck with everything-maria

[Kass]

Thank you! I've been waiting to hear from somebody for so long! I have more coming soon! Thank You!

[maria ( rose)]

aw you're welcome glad you brought it to the group & I hope you get more reviews .you're doing good ,,keep it up !