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     The shadow was spying on the twirling, mumbling patient. It was disguised as a flame, dancing back and forth on the white wall with the movement of the fire. Finally, the patient stopped twirling and stumbled over to a single chair in the center of the room to watchthe flames movement. The shadow then stretched to tap the wooden door that lay across the white, padded room, causing the girl to be distracted by the sound. She turned and followed the echoing  sound in circles around the room. It was then that the shaadow slippped from it's hiding place and followed the girl. He crept across the walls and was finally behind his victim. He grabbed her by the neck and squeezed, delighted by the gasps and coking sounds he heard. The girl took one last breath, and then fell limp to the floor. The shadow then ripped out the soul from the girls heart, and walked away from her, leavind her smiling and wide-eyed on the floor. She was cold and good as dead. 

Author's Note

Please enjoy!

Reviews

[Dy]

I enjoyed this piece. It has a nice little dark twist to it. Very mature for your age. Beautiful writing. Great job.

[PoetryPenPal]

Thank you very much!

[Dy]

You are very welcome.

[Maddi Snowden]

Love. Reminds me of American Horror Story. Well written. Love reading your stuff. Keep up the great work!

[PoetryPenPal]

Thank you for reading and this wonderful review.

[prodicallife]

Dear writer,

An amazing horror concept, worth appreciating.
Beautiful flow of the thoughts that kept me sticking to the words.

A bit of typographical mistakes like "watchthe (spacing) "; "shaadow (shadow)"; "slippped (slipped)"; "girls (girl's)"; "leavind (leaving)".

All together a great write. Keep writing good!!

Never mind with the typos, you can improve them easily, you are a great writer.

Stay blessed
Prodical

[PoetryPenPal]

I must have been typing so fast, I didn't see the typos. Thank you for catching them and this wonderful review!

[prodicallife]

I much appreciate your words dear writer. It is very usual thing one gets so much involved in the flow of the thoughts that they do not care much about what is printing.

Not to worry.

Stay smiling.
Prodical

[PoetryPenPal]

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[Emmy]

Well, space between watch and the in the third sentence, but that's all I see. I liked this spooky story! Keep it up!

[PoetryPenPal]

Thanks for the corrections!

[Emmy]

Anytime!:)

[Praveeta]

I like the choice and flow of words in your piece. I felt I witnessed the scary moment. Great work!

[PoetryPenPal]

Thank you very much Praveeta!

[Praveeta]

You are welcome.

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is spooky my little penpal.You have written it well .

[PoetryPenPal]

Thank you very much!

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are most welcome one thing though check your spelling right.Just a couple typos :)

[PoetryPenPal]

OK! I'm very bad at spelling!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Worry not you will get better :)

[PoetryPenPal]

I hope so. Thank you for the corrections,!