Passionate Kiss....

"I will never forget....."

This was the very moment

 when you captured my heart

An unexpected encounter

of true love from the start

Along the shores we walked

Talking whilst holding hands

Oblivious as the tide came in 

washing away the glistening sands

Locked in our world of dreams

our minds drifting out to sea

Without a care in the world

blissfully happy you and me

Sea breeze caressing my face

Mesmerized by the beauty

of this tranquil sublime place

Treasured memories we have together

of this one precious moment we shared

All the time you gave nothing away

I never stopped believing you cared

Never ever imagining this day

would remain with me forever

They say dreams do come true

Time ago I would have said never

Yet walking with you that day

I have never felt like this before

A pulling deep down in my body

Can't explain yet needed to explore

Over the sounds of the ocean 

we couldn't hear a sound

Only you and me the moon

 the sea as we looked around

You stopped and turned to me

I watched your face break a smile

Deep seated feelings rushed over me 

You felt the same too for a long while

Looking longingly into my eyes

You suddenly kissed me with such passion

Caught me of guard what a surprise

My heart skipped so many beats

As I responded to your kiss

Pressing my lips against yours

Overcome by feelings of sheer bliss

Emotions took hold no time to breath

rushing around my body wild and free

Crashing and fighting the urges

like tidal waves out at sea

Was this really happening to us

Our bodies responded with such haste

These burning desires consumed us

As I felt your mouth lips and taste

Couldn't hold back any longer

intoxicated by the woody smell of cologne

Your urgency to devour me too

was needy and mutual I wasn't alone

Just for this one moment in time

It felt like time stood still

Locked in your arms I didn't let go

there at my own free will

If body language spoke words

then what I read was true

The feelings we had were real

thats why I gave my all to you

At that very moment when we kissed

 Our lips pressed together so tight

There's a saying words speak volumes that I know

but your kiss spoke more to me that night...

Author's Note

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

This poem captures the moments and the feelings in a very artistic mastery...
Well penned.

[Mazie Tackett]

you sure like those long poems dont you

[Yellow Butterfly]

I sure do .... Thank you :o)

[Emrick]

mhhh.beautiful. nice ryhmes too.i liked the eyes,surprise part.

[Hotwater]

How romantic was that!... lovely picture created... nothing more romantic than that slow walk along the shoreline, with the sound of the sea breathing it's constant sighs as it moves to an fro upon a sandy beach... and the young couple in their dreamy state... completing the picture.
Well done to you.
*bird*

[Yellow Butterfly]

Thank you *smiles*

[Astro MacGuffin]

You definitely capture the intensity of memory this day left behind. All in all it does what it sets out to do quite well. I am not the world's biggest fan of love poems, so you can take my criticisms with a grain of salt, but here they are:

I felt like a couple lines were cliche. e.g. "I have never felt like this before" and "Just for this one moment in time / It felt like time stood still" etc. The rest of the poem proves you can say these things more poetically than this.

I also think some punctuation wouldn't hurt. I know punctuation is always optional in poetry, but it alleviates the reader's need to backtrack and be sure they're not guessing wrongly at the flow of your thoughts. Another option is just adding blank spaces if they make sense anywhere, but with such a flowing moment as this, I'm not sure that option makes sense here.

And lastly, the word "suddenly" can be a trap. "You suddenly kissed me with such passion" ... but the suddenness was delayed three syllables. This is total opinion, but "suddenly" often has more impact if it comes after the verb, allowing the verb to truly be more sudden.

And on a kudos note, you really know how to describe a nommy kiss :)

[Yellow Butterfly]

Wow! Thanks for your constructive review... I write how I feel and express the best way I can iof what is real and believe me this was real and when it happened grammer was the last thing on my mind *smile*. All in all I appreciate your words and will take on board.

I dig your compliment at the end... :o)

[ewest1220]

Romantic and beautifully written. Great job!

[Yellow Butterfly]

Thank you

[Robbie~xoxo~]

They say "It's in the Kiss"...that's when you know, you can feel it from your head to your toes. I love this! So romantic... a very sweet and memorable moment on the beach. Lovely write!

[Yellow Butterfly]

Thank you Robbie.... :o)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I love it... it's very romantic! :)

[Jibey]

Romantic and intense... Lovely!

[Yellow Butterfly]

I woildn't want it read any other way...

Thank you and I'm pleased you thought it was lovely :o)

[Walter Scott Morrison]

Very loving piece. It's not often you read love poetry anymore

[Yellow Butterfly]

Thank you :o)

[Revery]

Oh wow, I do writes like this, but the build you construct, the details and the love just saturated it all. wow, I'm not going to write anymore, I'm going to go hit the favorite button.

[Yellow Butterfly]

Awwwh Thank you so much... I just inboxed you before I read this review.. Thank you

Lol, JordBakers equally in awe of your work too..... :O)