Vision of a pearl

Taught winds goes ever so across shivering shoulders,
Tugging dark long hairs over a proud neck. A stark frame,
Lucid in candle light, glistens to the tune of the moon.
Two arms stretch toward the heavens, gliding into a rugged
Coat like the amber glow of a dying fire, warming even
In recollection. And there, apart from sight, sits
A dream, unrealized and uncertain.

The faith of sands curl scented whispers into soft desert touches.
Deafened palms bow forth, dipping in glee toward a well of wings.

Arid eyes trade glances, then gazes like the sun dancing upon the Nile.
A small grin draws open to a larger joy, permeating golden pauses
And ornate silence.

Then hopeful thunder.

And the rains come with no future or past, only endlessly carving her mystery into me.

Reviews

[v.a. stein]

The flow and imagery is above the quo on this one. you really captivated the reader with the scenerio of a the time spent with whoever your writing about. next to a camp fire.

I would say brilliant, but don't want to inflate that ego of yours to much.

So you'll have you settle with with a "GOOD SHOW OL' CHAP"

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

This is such a pretty well written poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[wolfshrew]

that last line is a good one.

[angelina neves]

lovely! Makes us wonder in the flow of it!

[Honeypot]

You have a really wonderful way with words! This is really pretty. I love the last line. I think it pulls it all together nicely. Great job.

[Kimmee Jean]

I"m not exactly sure how to place this...its raw as in very ...relatable yet...has something there...it might be just how early it is...good job though

[M. View]

Great work the rhythme of it was so insiring that it made me want to write some thing new THANK YOU! THNAK YOU! THANK YOU!

[Gandré]

I don't know why, but this reminds me about Francois Villon, a French vagabound in 15th century in Paris, he was put into jail and wrote there erotica... I liked this poem a lot. Well the pearl could be her paradise? Where he is trapped?

[Suhcej]

Very good work indeed, I liked the flow of it,
quite delightful this writing is,
I couldn't help to imagine every sentence as you transported me to this story with your words.
I usually prefer rhymes, but this one is perfect the way it is (well, maybe some grammar check, but maybe it was on purpose, I don't know)
Well done!

Demeter Suhcej