Undreamed

Water slowly drips down her gold hoop ring, condensed
From mist, drops of the falls sprinkled along her
Straightened dark hair.
Her dry lips together, tasting
The spray, full and supple.
And she sits there with me, grasping something.
Beyond our own lives. Effulgent. Ebullient.

I broke the moon for her.
Poured out the light and held it.

She could see
The distance of love, folded
Within a clasped, wet hand.

So much to show her. To share with.
Like a horizon's end on Pier 62.
The clouds slowing to a halt as
Moments are heard. And
I painted a picture over the Seattle skyline.

The day lifted away into the blanket
Of years. The song undone.

Reviews

[sheerpoetry]

'I broke the moon for her.
Poured out the light and held it.'

so inspiring, i love the tenderness of your words and the imagery of this piece, i want to say that your work makes me stop and take a breath and take my time to enjoy every moment of its existance. everyword is signifigant! A TRUE WORK OF ART

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Beautiful and such a melancholic tune at the same time. Almost a requim of sorts to me. Just lovley. Thank you for sharing you talent.
Light,
Siddartha

[the nothing]

exelent write your style of writeing is most unusall i love it I have never seen such descriptive behaver in a poem exlent write but who am i to say i can't spell

[Gandré]

I liked the melancholy of this poem.
Very very nice.

[EmpressPoetess]

"broke the moon for her.
Poured out the light and held it"..........This is an amazing line! It depicts deeply felt emotion from your heart, that nothing is impossible when you're in love! A truly romantic write!

[Jade (insanity)]

I really liked this. Amazingly writen. It was a really good poem. You have great potential. Keep writing!
-Nightmare

[Steffi]

Truely wonderful. You paint a very splendid image with your words. Especially the beginning there was such description that really made you see the image in your head.

I thought it was a wonderful piece.
Great write! and thanks for sharing!

[abejoyal]

Nice poem, the imagery was very powerful and though I thought I'd strive to avoid purple prose in all of your work it didn't quite seem overly dramatic. Nice job

[perfectlymetiKulous]

My favorite:
"I broke the moon for her.
Poured out the light and held it."

This was pure and lovely... the imagery is astounding and beautiful, and the poem itself was a masterpiece. I am quite glad that I happened upon your page. Nicely done!

[~The Queen~]

This imagery is amazing! The scene juumped off the screen to me as I read. I could feel the mist on my skin and could see the moon breaking, setting all that light free.
Well done. Very very very well done. I liked this one quite alot.

-Her Majesty,
The Queen