(Untitled)-->> Need help naming this one...

Feeling hurt, broken, and tired

I hung up my anger

And dressed myself with heartache.

On my sleeve, I wear

Shattered pieces of my heart

The makings of me

Are falling apart…

Needle and thread in hand

I attempt to hem

The fabric of my life.

Miserably, I fail

As I wash and scrub

The stains with my tears

I hang the shredded heartache

Out to dry…

Hurt, broken, and tired

I once again

Dress myself up in anger…
 

Author's Note

Can't think of a good name for this one...So I am open to your suggestion...

Reviews

[Lady Lazarus.]

I once again

Dress myself up in anger�


such a bloody amazing two lines!:|
a really heartbreaking sad yet hopeful piece of work...To get keep trying even if we fail for that beautiful chance things will go well and we will be victorious...I really feel a lot from this piece of work.great job

[ABitBrokenPoetry]

a sad & beautifully written piece. i loved the lines "Miserably, I fail As I wash and scrub The stains with my tears I hang the shredded heartache". love the metaphor here, taking off anger as if it were clothes, dressing in heartache, slipping anger back on. a brilliant write. as for the title, i can only give you suggestions i would use. i think i like 'Closet' the best. or 'Shredded Heartache' or 'Dressed in Heartache' as was suggested earlier. I also really like the suggestion down there of Worn. great work & good luck with the title.

[Serend1p1ty]

What a poem.
The description, the lavish way of metaphorically describing things.
This was a really wonderful poem.
Since you speak so much about clothing & dressing metaphors, maybe you could call this "My Dresser"
Just an idea.

Yours truly,
cloud6

[Sean M. Addams]

very nicely done... like the detail in this piece alot.... the opening of this piece and ending are just amazing... overall nice job on this... I like Fran's suggestion for the title myself

[Kyng Kemuel IV]

well done on the metaphor....
i'd suggest as a title...
"Worn"
touchin on both how you felt and the clothing theme
Peace

[Raven Wilson]

Wow I think its amazing, I would suggest...
Seamstress
as a title.

[Fran Marie]

A very indepth piece with deep emotions springing forth; Anger, heartache, then

back to anger` your metaphors relate to dressing, sewing,shredding, washing stains in tears ~ all

great descriptives in this well crafted piece~ I think it centers on the heartache emotion

mostly~IMO "Dressed in Heartache" seems an aptly title ,at any rate I'm sure you'll think of something

Well DonE!! and thanks for sending this my way!