Leaving you

I want to leave but you convince me to stay with words...

 

‘Leaving you’

 

I open up to you like an unhealed wound

And I bleed out all of my emotions,

But you only cut me deeper

When you walk out the door.

Your words linger and leave bruises

I am constantly beaten up by you.

Your verbal abuse crashes into my skull,

While you vocally batter my soul.

You crush my dreams of me and you

With your awful attittude

But yet I continue to love…

Some how you are the cause

And the cure to all of my pain.

I keep holding onto the old ‘us’

When things were less complicated

And my opinion mattered to you.

I finally gather the courage

To leave you …and…Something…

             Pulls me back.

I don’t know why I let you

Have this control over me

But one day I am going to leave…

               ...One day….

 

Reviews

[REALIZE]

The conflict is painfully evident. Tainted love is love nonetheless and you present it well. you detail the verbal abuse and the anger that so many go through in passionate yet mistake-filled relationships. It would be interesting to detail the growth you show in a sequel-like poem. That would be interesting I think.

[Lafayette]

Very well done

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This is wonderfully written and i can relate .. the verbal abuse is in ways worse than physical .. there should be no comparison as both are wrong and hurt..
Holding onto the past and how it used to be hoping for the past to return and the love brand new.. a good poem with good metaphors ... and imagines are right on ..

Chloe
xo

[BlessedLove]

I've been here b4...wow...it's just weird for me to read something from someone I don't even know..but has thoughts written down that I may have written while I was in that situation...
Good write...Be strong...and do what's best for you! Despite what you may feel..
All the best.

[Jeff Bresee]

Leave! It is better to long for him from a distance.

Very well written.

[everwander]

What a beautiful piece- it makes me very sad as well. The word choice, the flow, each statement so simply yet so boldly stated. I love dramatic poems and this one just nails it dead on. Keep up the awesome work :)

[Sean M. Addams]

i liked this alot .. a very well expressed piece...I think the first step is to take a grasp of how things are and then take the next step to do what is best for you in the circumstances... a very strong write..nice job on this..

[XxVampyrCandyXx]

I can relate so much to this peice. It is exactly how I felt before I left my fiance of seven years a couple months ago.

[Jason]

I see and hear about this same peoblem with alot more woman than even I thought. To me its a sad situation for many reasons, but most of all (to me) it makes it hard for good men to make it over ther emotional walls that have been put up but, but i realized that hurt men do the same thing.


Over all great write though!

"You crush my dreams of me and you
With your awful attittude
But yet I continue to love�
Some how you are the cause
And the cure to all of my pain."


Thanks

[Charles D. Moorer]

This poem capture the plight of a lover who know he needs to leave but cannot; there is something about the other that despite abuse, he stays, cannot help himself, though he knows it is not good for him. Love must run its course. But until it does, he has it bad and that ain't good. Nicely written; the tone and tenor are just right for the story told.