~Beauty is her Name~

One of my greatest fears is to leave this Earth and not be remembered...

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~Beauty is her Name~

Her face was mere perfection,
Beauty longed to be her name.
Her hair was as long as the Nile River.
Her eyes as blue as the sea.
The bridge of her nose as magnificent
As the Golden Gate itself.
Her lips were as full as the moon
Her smile alone could blind you.
Her features were so symmetrical
It was as if God Himself
Had hand crafted her from scratch�
Men were marveled by her beauty.
Women secretly envied her flawless silhouette.
Once very lively she now lay still
Eyes closed, mouth stiffly turned up
Her arms crossed over her chest
She lies breathless in her coffin.
A small crowd attends her funeral
The only words spoken were of her beauty.
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......How will you be remembered?

Author's Note

We should want to be judged by the fruit that we bear, not material things, or what we look like...

Reviews

[Andrew Reeves]

Deep sista! I loved the depth of meaning in this piece. The only thing I saw that might hinder this piece, is the fact that it seems a little cliche'ish. Phrases like . . ."long as the Nile River", ". . .as full as the moon" Try switching these up a bit.

Otherwise, fantastic job. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Thanks for the read.

[Mel Stevens]

Her lips were as full as the moon
Her smile alone could blind you.
-I especially like this section. You used the moon instead of the sun to blind and be full, I like the contrast.

All want to be remembered for something, it is human nature, and unfortunately, many want to be remembered for how they looked, how much money they had...but that is not actually the person.
I want to be remembered for my actions, and what, if any, good I accomplished while still here.

I like this poem, it really makes you think about the here and now, and the inevitable future.

[James Takeo Panton]

Wow, this is really heavy stuff.....excellent write you have done here......

[Kube]

Dang i was wondering where this was going!!! awesome ending and totally ture! nice!!!!

[forfila]

Very true Authors note, it fits the poem well. Very deep questioning too, I like it, nice write.

[Nicole Renee]

This is very interesting question. I'm not sure how anybody will be remember. My fear is death, but that's not my point. Anyways, this was really good!

-Nicole

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

deep, powerful. wonderfully written piece!


great write

Thats some deep a*s stuff. it almost made me cry cus at first i could picture how beautiful she was. then i found out that she was dead. and its crazy how people only remembered her from beauty. but i guess its best to be remembered by beauty than not to be remembered at all

[Crystal Mullings]

I wanted to be remembered by my positive attributes to society. Good poem

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

i took a psychology class in college about death and dying - this is one of the things we discussed in the class - how you want to be remembered ... fantastic piece - makes the readers think.