*Rescue me*

I am drowning in love...rescue me...

We sit in screaming silence
As my head clanks and clatters
With wordless yik-yak;
That seems to be
On our regular menu;
So I take a bite every now and again
Just to satisfy my appetite.
We converse
And make dead-end chit-chat;
Expanding the deep blue ocean
That’s already between us.
So I put a note in a bottle
And send you an S.O.S.
Begging you
To rescue me from this sinking ship;
I’m plunging, and plummeting
Into this dark salty sea;
I gasp for air,
And choke on vague water,
As huge waves thrash me towards shoreline
I tumble onto dry land
Weary and tired;
And stumble
Out of love with you…
 

Author's Note

It seems that Falling out of love is alot harder than Falling in love...your reviews and opinions are welcomed...

Reviews

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

I try to believe that there is someone out there for all of us, it just takes time and the right moment to find them. But I feel your pain in this piece. And you're right, falling out of love is very hard... I've gone through that many times. Wonderfully penned, and very well expressed. Nicely done.


Great Write,
Rayne

[Stacey]

Ahh I love the visuals and the last two lines. I can't wait to stumble out of love myself.

[An Ordinary Woman]

**Falling out of love seems to be harder than falling in love..but when it happens its always painful..

... yes it is always painful. It hurts and it's hard but writing poetry helps ... this is beautiful and well written. I enjoyed it and can easily relate!!

[PhoeniX]

hm. very true. falling out of love does hurt. i like how the person you described in the poem was trying to ask for help from the person they were falling from. but in the end the help never came. good job

[Aradie Rain]

Yes it is, i am sorry for your pain. It's almost like a relization, on how this person was not there for you when you needed them. and in the end you found it out for yourself. I personally love the last 14 lines (lol)

[Sexy Jones]

all i could think is "wow."

[Nana Carmine]

It's a lot harder than falling in love. Falling out of love feels like your world is falling apart. you did a wonderflu job expressing this. Thank you for sharing

~Nana Carmine