Suffocate

written to urban nomad

And I want my last breath 

With your mouth on mine 

The taste of your kiss 

Our tongues entwined 

All of  my demons 

Submissive to you 

Watching you gently 

Break me in two

I want to feel your pain 

Driving into me 

Because I self destruct 

So beautifully 

I'll play the martyr 

Just  erase this ache 

Kiss me harder 

Let 

me 

suffocate... 

-Poetic Angel

Reviews

[Timothy McNeil]

Oh, I remember this one... A rare rhyming poem from you and it took my breath away rereading it, just as it did the first time. You make me hurt, bestie, but you also fill me with awe at your beauty. I agree with Liquefied Realities there - interesting but twisted, as well as flawlessly approached and rendered to read. Couldn't have said it better myself.

[Poetic Angel]

Thank you Bestie!!!

[FIN]

You're an interesting character, to me; and you present yourself thus so.

This piece is beautiful, but now this "demon of a man" is written as your savior, while at the same instance you're urging him on to feed you his pain.

Twisted, is the word that comes to mind. Interesting; but twisted.

This piece I see flawlessly approached and rendered to read. I admire all your work from technical stand-points and being able to depict such raw emotion... but

But you, Angel... conundrum.

Much love,

LR

P.S. Actually, I would of liked the word "suffocate" to be broken up in hyphens, "su-ffo-cate;" seems to take the breath out of the lungs whilst read.

My thoughts, for once, on a marvelous rendering of emotion.