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Reviews

[Relic]

Wow, that's some ending. 'I jump into the water....' Right away I interpreted that little line as being society. I believe we have our own paradise upstairs in our heads. Meditation is where I find mine. It seems to be the only respite for me.

This depicts the unsure mind and resembles many of us, especially that last POW of an ending. Life seems to be a crap shoot or a game to me. Being able to play it takes courage as well as stepping back and getting a different perspective. I wish you well in the game.

Nice writing.

[PoeticSorcery]

thanks, that was a very nice review and I'm glad you got where I was coming from, and going with this piece :)

[lorennn]

I absolutely love this! I like how it gives me a feeling of loneliness and empty, but yet I know there is hope or a chance. Great work!

[PoeticSorcery]

I'm glad to hear that it had such a strong effect, I always give my all when writing my poems, as I'm sure you do as well :)

[Nina H.]

Simply amazing. Very well written. The last 4 lines are my favorite, I guess I can relate that's why.

[PoeticSorcery]

glad to know there are others who feel like I do and can relate to my strife.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

I can feel a strong feeling of emotions that fit what you portray, great work!

"Time seems to have stopped, or am I simply in a dream," - great line! Time seems to be the first thing to go in the scene of a dream.

[PoeticSorcery]

thanks, I like using expressionism in my poetry

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You're very welcome! You do it well!