Let You Go

A short abstract poem of learning to move on.

I'm wearing flesh like a sweater
     as my spine learns to let you go
Each day I'm finding new ways to hate what I've become
I'm drowning in thoughts like oceans
     and the islands in my bones reach out
                    out of pity
There are whispers where my face once was
     as my smile slips like sand through fingers
     as my spine learns to let you go

Author's Note

Criticism and advice is always welcome.

Reviews

[Aarea]

Very interesting. You have a very specific style of writing that I find very impressing. It makes the reader think. This poem is even better than Lost and Found. Great work. 'I love the line "as my smile slips like sand through my fingers." Amazing writing.

[PoeticParadox]

Thank you very much for the kind words!

[Kate Henderson]

From the first line I knew this would not disappoint. Really enjoyed this one. Fantastic work :)

[Rene Salinas]

There is something cold and calculated about this maybe becuase you are a developer not really sure or maybe the reference to the spine as her going left you spineless. And the reafirmation that you are not going through the best of times with thoughts coming to think you away makes even colder. But not desensitized yet having to relearn emotions becuase of your loss.
Very intimate.
Thankyou PoeticParadox

[PoeticParadox]

This was a very kind, very detailed response. I really appreciate the time you took to let me know how you felt.

[Frieda P]

Although it may be somewhat abstruse the sentiment comes through loud and clear...

'whispers where my face was' Great line. Enjoyed.

[Marianna Me]

As my smile slips like sand through fingers. Wow, simple yet beautiful. Love it! Great work.

[RAOrourke]

Great line "I'm wearing flesh like a sweater" & "as my smile slips like sand through fingers". You're writing brings about great visuals.

[laalaxox]

Really enjoyed reading this!!! Liked how it was very specific and to the point:)

[Andrew]

Very creative and it's intriguing it's short however it packs a lot in the small size. I enjoyed it very much. Keep it up.

[Anastasia Stale]

What I really like about poems is that they appear very precise but straight to the point. No more. No less. Yours was a great example. The wordings came out beautiful and flawless. I really liked the ending.