Lost and Found

A short abstract poem about missing someone that you shouldn't miss.

Please baby, don't sleep
     I can't feel my breath without your hand on my chest
     My mind is falling apart at the stitches in my heart
I'd describe you like a sunset
     But sunsets and roses are soft, and beautiful
          You love like a volcano
An explosion of heat that envelops everything
     Leaving behind charred remains of men
          Grateful to have burned
I don't want you back
                    But it's cold here
     And you didn't quite kill me last time

Author's Note

Criticism and advice is always welcome.

Reviews

[RAOrourke]

Leaving behind charred remains of men
Grateful to have burned...wonderfully descriptive lines!
Well done!!

[Aarea]

Interesting writing. I enjoyed the change in style. You definitely have potential. Keep it up! She loves like a volcano...Awesome.

[PoeticParadox]

I appreciate the feedback!