I Remember

I Remember

A Poem by PoeticParadox
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A short abstract poem about remembering and being lost.

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               I remember when you used to call me sunshine

I thought you were a liar
          because the broken lamps along the highway of bones and ego
     were burned out
                         and bleeding
          I was no shining light of glory and honour and hope

                                   I was a thunderstorm

rumbling along the canyons and valleys of my mind
               brimming with the rainwater of yesterdays sorrows
          and tomorrows high hopes
                              and low dreams that I would settle for
                         to feel free

© 2014 PoeticParadox


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PoeticParadox
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You were sunshine so how is it that you use the phrase "broken LAMPS along the highway of bones" .. it is a nice piece of work though.. i just wanted to say that if you used the word sunshine you could have better used its features as you've done with the thunderstorm.

~Sophy

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

PoeticParadox

10 Years Ago

That is a good point, but in this instance I was using sunshine as a pet name that is fairly common .. read more
Sophy Freebirds

10 Years Ago

So it has a connotative meaning rather than denotative.. ;) okay.Gotcha



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I remember a lot of things but what I like about this piece is the choice of word you use to describe the memories.
great job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


You were sunshine so how is it that you use the phrase "broken LAMPS along the highway of bones" .. it is a nice piece of work though.. i just wanted to say that if you used the word sunshine you could have better used its features as you've done with the thunderstorm.

~Sophy

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

PoeticParadox

10 Years Ago

That is a good point, but in this instance I was using sunshine as a pet name that is fairly common .. read more
Sophy Freebirds

10 Years Ago

So it has a connotative meaning rather than denotative.. ;) okay.Gotcha

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PoeticParadox
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I am a 23 y/o Computer Programmer and Analyst. I've been writing for almost 10 years now, originally it was simple short stories and optimistic poems of love and life. In the past 6 or so years there .. more..

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