CHAMPAGNE (Senryu Haiku)

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Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

mmmmmmmmmmmdelicious sip ... must buy some on my next run to a "wet" county ...i live in Arkansas :)) i would guess this a senryu for sure ...

E.

[Butch Decatoria]

I've never been nor know anything about your state, although I've met friends who are originally from Little Rock, but thats about it...

You do know the difference between the two? --Senryu vs. Haiku?

Traditional Haiku's in any number of syllables per the 3 lines (most common is 5 - 7 - 5 syllable count) is that the subject matter mainly focuses on all things nature inspired or of the wilderness variety. While the senryu is considered a more modernized take on the haiku structure & form, yet its subject matter is not of the natural wonders of the wild, neither of the flora or fauna imagery written about--but instead the human experience or the emotional aspects or point of view --seems more centralized in Senryu's.

Sorry for acting like a poetry Nerd by having this impulse to explain something I'm sure people in the cafe already know more about than someone like me, who just became more serious about his writing... And Thank you for review ...

[Einstein Noodle]

here i thought you were undecided as in your title is printed Senryu Haiku .. ;) i always have to look them up ... :) i see you meant that this is a senryu ...

[Butch Decatoria]

yes. Still a haiku, having its 3 lines and 575 syllable count, but its more Senryu because of what is written. I just decided to just put both Haiku and Senryu in parenthesis so there's no confusion. Thanks again for your kindness...

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ..................

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

I could taste the kisses! Nice Senryu.

[Butch Decatoria]

Thank you for saying so, I do appreciate it.