My Hollow World

Not fond of giving a description at the moment...

What's there to learn when you've seen behind the curtain?

You've caught a glimpse of the actors/actresses,

practiced their rituals,

worn out your designer jeans,

that ultimately transformed them into vintage.

There needn't be a love that's just right,

I've been pleased by many,

selfishly and unselfishly I deeply penetrated their hearts.

I've torn down traffic signs due to apathy,

for months pedestrians played in the streets,

automobiles sped and totaled each other.

Last night I told someone I loved them,

later I fucked them,

then I disappeared from view.

I've obeyed when it was necessary,

and broken laws when no one was watching,

but each choice was nothing more.

Reviews

[Matching Socks]

I like this piece a lot K.
There's so much honesty in the voice of the speaker. (you?)
That you labeled these as choices not decisions is telling in itself.
Decisions are made after careful thought, risk and impact assessment.
Choices are generally made spontaneously without thinking.
You're admitting your lack of judgment in a sense ( or maybe not YOU, the speaker of the poem, you are perfect of course... )
I also notice that there's no remorse here. :)
But your " descriptor" beneath the title could be read as remorse or acknowledgement of wrong.
I liked this for it's honesty and it's maybe my fave from you.

[Jack Cassidy]

I am not usually impressed by reviews, but this one... You seem to have really picked on what I was attempting to express. Thank you, K.

[Jack Cassidy]

The descriptor is just highlighting my laziness to go further with an explanation. There is definitely no remorse.

[Jack Cassidy]

*picked up on

[Matching Socks]

glad you corrected that, hate to have people think i am picking on you. : )
like i am right now.

[Jack Cassidy]

Haha, very funny. Just don't shove me in the sand box okay?

[Matching Socks]

not my style darlin'...
i'm more of
"stick-my-foot-out-and-trip-you-as-you're-walking-by"
kind of kid.
i don't like getting my hands dirty so i stay out of the sand box.

(so.... do i sound pretty bad a$$ or what? admit it. I do.)

[Jack Cassidy]

So aren't just about rainbows after all... Now we're getting somewhere... Ha, jk

[Matching Socks]

That's right... don't forget them unicorns.

[Ally Monique]

Very honest piece. There is no hesitation here. I think these kind of pieces are the best. I love how blunt this piece is as well, especially the second of last stanza! Very well done :)

[Jack Cassidy]

You're an honest reviewer, thanks for that... Cheerio, K.

[Ruth]

Love the rawness to this piece, the boldness, poignant poem, pleased to be connected with you hon :) x

[Jack Cassidy]

Another kind review, it is greatly appreciated... Cheers, K.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it's those rules we break when nobody else sees....we see ourselves and have to live with it...our choices.

[Jack Cassidy]

Thanks Jacob. Living with choices is what responsible adults do, but maniacs, that is a different story..