Fragmented Fortitude

Your translation will probably be better.

Yes, it's a piece on fear.
And yes, it might give you cold sweats and force the heart from its vessel.
This worded thing, a compounded page of guilt that forbids your salvation.
It's an underlying note of romantic discontent,
irrevocable is its willingness to tarnish your adherence.
A general malaise will undoubtedly fill your world with an uptight scowl,
which still possesses the aforementioned fear I've exposed so plainly.
So then test your decisive undertakings with abandonment,
even if that means absorbing some hurt.

Reviews

[Sophy Freebirds]

O yea we need to be weak to become strong sometimes.. we need to treat both the imposters - truimph and disaster in the same way... Nice write.. I am inspired. ;)

~Sophy

[Jack Cassidy]

I like how you describe them as imposters... and you found them out... I'm glad you were inspired Sophy... K.

[Frieda P]

Feel the fear and charge ahead anyway....like the juxtaposition of fragmented and abandon, gives that off balance feeling...

[Jack Cassidy]

Wow, thanks for the kind review. Off balance... two words that represent my personality very well. K.

[Frieda P]

Doesn't it most of us? My pleasure...

[Jack Cassidy]

Scientifically speaking, not really...

[Frieda P]

I must have a select group of friends....

[Jack Cassidy]

I wasn't trying to sound combative. In a sense, I catch your drift. Thanks again. K.

[Frieda P]

Oh, I didn't think you were...no problemo.

[Jack Cassidy]

All I meant was that if most of us are off balanced/unbalanced, what is being balanced? What makes us unbalanced is a comparison to a set of rules or system. If most are unbalanced, then how are we different from each other and does that become balanced again since the majority would outweigh the minority? Sorry, just questions. No need to respond.

[Frieda P]

Now you're making me dizzy :) ..I have none of the answers, all I know is that most people aren't totally balanced, at least at one time in their lives....life is difficult and throws us pushes regularly...how we deal with it is the 'balance' part.

[Jack Cassidy]

Really well said, thank you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i love the theme....

we have to approach life sometimes with abandonment and no fear of getting hurt...otherwise we will become stone cold and dead in the water...we have to feel to be alive, even if it is pain.

[Jack Cassidy]

Truth in your words Jacob, thank you for your feedback.

[Matching Socks]

Help me, I've fallen for your poem.
It hurts, but not enough to break me.
I will leave you now, stronger and wiser.

:)

[Jack Cassidy]

Ha. Thanks for your kind words. I'm glad you're okay, come back at any time:)