"Mama Can You See Me"

"Mama Can You See Me" Posted On 03/04/2013 20:30:43 by Night Can you see me Mama... Do you know the reason why. Could you feel the pain I felt Did you see the tears I cried. Can you see me Mama... Did you see your little girl Broken and alone In this great big lonely world. I knew you'd come to see me Even though I'm fast asleep... And the flowers are so beautiful Oh Mama don't you weep. © Night.2013  Tags: Night Poetry Writing

Reviews

[jdr / Jennifer]

This is beautifully written- yet quite sad. You are such an elegant writer with so much talent. I read this a couple of times- as tears filled my eyes. Very dramatic & emotional write. It reached in and grabbed a hold of my heart. Thank you for sharing this truly touching piece of poetry.

'Can you see me Mama...
Did you see your little girl
Broken and alone
In this great big lonely world'

[Night]

Thank you my friend...it does this poet good to know his writing touches the hearts of those who feel life....=)

[Coyote Poetry]

A very sad poem. I could feel the heartbreak. A sad visions create by the ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Kat Leila]

Ohhhh....this broke my heart. Amazing!

[Night]

Thanks Kat....you are officially my new friend. ..lol
i hope my writing takes you to places you've only dreamed about.

[Kat Leila]

I believe it will!

[Night]

Nice......=)

[Brittany Zedalis]

This is so emotional and wonderful. Having just lost my mom, this brought tears to my eyes. Your poetry is always a pleasure to read.

[Night]

Awe, I'm sorry to hear of your loss....you take care and thank you very much...=)

[one sky]

This is so heartbreaking.
There are some angels who long for the love of their parents- those unwanted children, and those who were not given the chance to live longer in this world.
I have seen the same picture somewhere in my memory...

Thanks for sharing.

[Night]

You are very welcome my friend...and thank you for reading my work.......=)

[one sky]

You're welcome.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

You give the gothic style a touch of heaven!

I bow in respect!

[Night]

Awe you flatter me kind sir....always with respect and a warm thank you...=)

[Cassie]

Another one that has taken me to a very sad place.

[Night]

Emotions are most felt through poetry I think....=)

[Georgia Gypsy]

Lovely, like a song of longing, missing that person that is most dear....
very touching!!

[Night]

Nice to see you...and thank you very much...God bless you...=)

[Frieda P]

This brought to mind that song by Barbra "Papa, Can You Hear Me', which gave it an even more emotional twist, not that it needed it, so somber and affecting. Such a gorgeous read David. Thanks for sharing this one.

[Night]

Thank you my friend...The girl in the pic just spoke to me...sometimes the feelings I get from seeing loneliness are overwhelming to say the least...

[Frieda P]

You did an excellent job of transferring that emotion to me...good job, really superb work David.

[Night]

Thank you Frieda, I appreciate your thoughts on my writing very much...=)

[Frieda P]

;-) My pleasure xo

[written in blood]

:-(... OH this touched me.. very moving.. thank you for sharing.

[Night]

Thank you...=)