"What Would You Say"

"What Would You Say"

A Poem by Night

What Would You Say…?

 


Why should I give you another day...

If God asked you this

what would you say?

What would you do if He took you today

Would you cry out for mercy

as you pray?

Has he been in your heart day and night
Have you lived your life

doing what's right?

So why should I give you another day...
If God asked you this

what would you say?

 




Night.2013

 

© 2013 Night


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I read as being quite sinister, almost as if the POV was some sort of Angel Of Death seeking to cleanse the world of its oxygen thieves.
I can also see an inspirational side to it though, prompting people to try and do the right thing.

Although a very simple seeming poem, it is very deep and far reaching. Well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Night

11 Years Ago

...you see well my friend...and thank you...:)
Nirego

11 Years Ago

No problem. Very often it is good to try and find other angles, you can learn a lot more.



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"Why should I give you another day?"
If God asked me this, what would I say?

Please give me another day, my Lord, I want to stay
I want to live with my loved ones, please give me another day

I want to ask forgiveness to them whom I hurt so much
Show them the love, the real change, from the bottom of my heart

I want to be with my precious friend, the one I met as an angel
Tell him the truth inside my heart, show him I really, really care

I want to show the whole wide world the best gifts that I have at hand
Tell them the mystery of life that given by the Lord our God

I want to live, I want to live, another day, please give me Lord
I want to live another day to feel the beauty of this world!

Ahh..you're poems are nice muse for me to create another poem, my friend. That's only a part of my response poem which I will be posting on my page later on. Thank you for this inspiring piece.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Night

10 Years Ago

Very good....there is much to do in your life.....live it well my friend.......=)
You don't really want me to answer this, right?

Beautifully written, good message. Thought provoking as always David!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

haha I wonder why? ;-)
Night

11 Years Ago

...lol
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

:-D xo
Oh my goodness! This is one of the best poems I have read in awhile. I love reading poems that have a religious tint to it! I am sure with God in your presence or him talking to you period, you're too stunned to have a response back to him. I don't even know what I'd say to him. I'm a Christian, but also I'm a sinner. No one's perfect by no means either. I try my best to fulfill His needs and His word. Back to your poem, I love the structure of the poem and how the stanzas are laid out. You done such a beautiful job on an amazing poem, I must say. I think this is the first poem that I have read by you. I love this though! :)

I love this stanza:

"Has he been in your heart day and night
Have you lived your life
doing what's right?"

Side note: I'll continue reading your work! It's fabulous so far! :)

P.S.-The answer to the question is give me what you think I deserve and I'll take it, since I'm your child and will obey. I'll live life to the fullest and never take anything for granted. If you were to take my life away right now, that would be okay too. I atleast know that I tried to be enough for you.

Ashley Rivers-Dream BIG and you'll win BIG ;)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Night

11 Years Ago

...your words speak of life and I see love in your heart too...thank you my friend...and God bless y.. read more
Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect

11 Years Ago

Thank you! You're welcome :)
ANother beautiful one my friend

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Night

11 Years Ago

...sweet, thank you...:)
A slight edge here, which works well. Insightful, deeply probing questions.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Emerald Seas

11 Years Ago

:)
Night

11 Years Ago

...peace be with you my friend, and "God has not given us the spirit of fear, but of power, and of l.. read more
Emerald Seas

11 Years Ago

Thank you, how sweet! I noticed all your tattoos. I wrote a short story ages ago that just came to m.. read more
greatly poem behind simple words...i like the way you write your fantastic poem simply...lovely piece...keep writing.

DEVANSHU RAJPUT

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Night

11 Years Ago

thank you my friend...:)
When we've been here ten thousand years...
bright shining as the sun.
We've no less days to sing God's praise...
then when we've first begun...

Good Questions David ... .. I Love you .. Jazz

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Night

11 Years Ago

marvelous...and I love you...:)
J. J.  Nightingale

11 Years Ago

.............:)................
I read as being quite sinister, almost as if the POV was some sort of Angel Of Death seeking to cleanse the world of its oxygen thieves.
I can also see an inspirational side to it though, prompting people to try and do the right thing.

Although a very simple seeming poem, it is very deep and far reaching. Well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Night

11 Years Ago

...you see well my friend...and thank you...:)
Nirego

11 Years Ago

No problem. Very often it is good to try and find other angles, you can learn a lot more.

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