"The Second Child"

...it's where desire lives.

 

There is a place

where

few have been.

 

A place of flesh

and

 mortal sin.

 

The darkened sky

gives way

to rain. 

 

A rigid cold

like

drizzled pain. 

 

Where pleasure

soothes

the troubled mind.

 

Deep inside

you might

just find...

 

A second child

that lives

within...

 

A place of flesh

and

mortal sin.

 

 

 

 Night.2013

Author's Note

...it's in there....Night.

Reviews

[Salar Majak]

wow i love this one
the struggle, the fight, the battle!
great write

[Night]

Yes the war between the flesh and the Spirit.....thanks for reading...:)

[Salar Majak]

you are very welcome i really enjoyed it

[Ayvid N]

This brings to mind Cain and Able...only Cain was first there...
The struggle of the first and the second child will always be...Each man's fight.
A bitter legacy of Adam's children...

Thanks you for the very insightful poem.

[Night]

...nice, and yes, there will always be a war against the flesh...thank you for the awesome review...:)

[Southern Cross]

I think we all have that second child deep within. The rational first child rears his head to me( but not often enough) in time to save me. Great write

[Night]

...I believe so too, thanks for reading this my friend...:)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

wonderful write :)

[Night]

Neva...always a pleasure to see you here...thank you for the love...:)

[Be myself!]

This reminds me of myself when I am upset. After the anger and pain comes a little girl ready to go play at the playground. Great piece of literature

[Night]

...it's good when poetry makes you look inside...thank you my friend...:)

[Be myself!]

Your welcome

[LA Lorena]

great write David, I like this one best so far of what I have read of yours. It just clips along, and lends itself to being read aloud quite splendidly. I'm a bit of a nut for aural stimulation. ;)

[Night]

...thank you Lorena...:)

[KAOlmsted]

Some might argue this is the first child and the second child is the moral, less dominant one ;-) Great write, David.

[Night]

....thank you my friend...:)

[Night]

Kimmer, a second thought about what you had said....this piece was really written about myself...You see I am a very strong man of God and my Spirit man has become the dominant child, leaving my primal urges as the "Second Child"...I guess it depends on the person really....thought I'd share that with you...thanks again my friend.:)

[KAOlmsted]

My pleasure; and thank you so much for the insight.

[Night]

How are you today by the way...?

[KAOlmsted]

Been busy doing research, just thought I'd pop my head in, take a peek ;-) How are you?

[Night]

I'm good, thanks...on my first cup of coffee...shaking off the sleepies still...lol.

[KAOlmsted]

It's almost 4 in the afternoon here, I'm almost done for the day...you need to move closer or log on earlier *laugh* (I don't think I'll be up late tonight for more shenanigans; I just read LA's piece...too funny)

[Night]

yep...it was. These are times I know I'll remember for sure...thanks again for your friendship...you have a sweet night...:)

[KAOlmsted]

You're a good friend, to put up with us *laugh* Thank you, David...you enjoy the rest of your day.

[Night]

...you know, it's a pleasure really...you guys are good people...and I'm glad I'm here...:)

[KAOlmsted]

The feeling is mutual.

[Frieda P]

Ha, you talking to me David? ;-)

Kidding aside, this is a lusty, wonderful read...full of truths and torments of the soul...you always hit it out of the park my friend!

[Night]

...thank you very much...:)