Wannabe

A Poem by Tori Jones

When this world has taken control

I sit down and think

How blessed I am to be

Still living

And breathing

Which keeps me from thinking

I am a lost cause and a waste of time

I can be who I wannabe

And need to stop

Basing things off

Depression and grief

For love is so much more

Than pain and sorrow

For it never asks to borrow

The control that I hold

But goes along with the things

That I put in store

And makes me able to be

Who I wannabe

I don't have to live off

People and their wicked insults

For I am loved

By the one true God

Who sent his son to save

The world

Faults and all

For God is love

And will forever be

There for people

like you and me

Life is sometimes hard

But we need to press on

And fight back with all that we are

If we ever want to escape depression

And feel loved within

Then you can finally be

Who you wannabe

© 2016 Tori Jones

Author's Note

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Jade

this speaks to me, and yes there is always one true God, only he can judge us. He accepts us the way we are.

Posted 8 Years Ago

8 Years Ago

Yes, he does...I'm glad you like my poem, thanks for reviewing... God bless!

Lorry

Anything that shows you the person you wannabe and puts you in the right direction of attaining it, will not only get you to where you want to be, but give you better understanding of the sadness others must have in their lives, to go about throwing insults at others in the hope of making themselves feel better. I have no sympathy for bullies, physical or mental, but we can but hope they see their true selves one day, and weep at what they see.
Only you have the right to decide what and who you become, as you so eloquently stated in this fine piece of writing and understanding.

Posted 8 Years Ago

8 Years Ago

Thank you for the review... Bullies really aren't bad people, they just let the wrong people have im.. read more

Gee

We should all strive to be the best that we can be, sadly, many of us do not. I agree with Jacob regarding the lines he has highlighted. This is a very good write Tori

Posted 8 Years Ago

8 Years Ago

Thank you, I really appreciate you kindness... You have a vast understanding when it comes to love, .. read more

LazerRays

very good! you gave me a new look on life!!

Posted 8 Years Ago

8 Years Ago

I'm glad, Sarée...

jacob erin-cilberto

these lines are fantastic:

For love is so much more
Than pain and sorrow
For it never asks to borrow

Posted 8 Years Ago

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my work...

Inject Positivity

The best attitude a human can ever have to be happy in this world is the attitude of gratitude... I'm very very glad that you are trying to look at the beauty around you and trying to see your inside, God never left you, He knows your deepest pain, darkest secrets and your biggest dreams... Love yourself my frnd, do not worry.. . You are precious in His eyes... You are important to the whole system of this universe...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 8 Years Ago

8 Years Ago

Thank you Dhiman, your words mean a lot to me....

8 Years Ago

Just be yourself... Let others think what they think, go out there and live for yourself and for tho.. read more

Ookpik

.......................................... : ) Amazing poem

Posted 8 Years Ago

8 Years Ago

Thank you...

The Exiled Wolf

Thank you for reminding me of God, when I used to push Him away when I am too sad and let myself rot in the darkness. I like how you structure the poem.

Just one suggestion:
I guess the ellipsis (...) can be removed from both the title and the last line to make it more sure.