Yawn...

When I wake up

I have to yawn

And stop to think

"What am I doing wrong?"

Everything in life is so hard

And I'm struggling to survive

Just taking the time to yawn 

At the crack of dawn

Isn't as easy as you would think

Everything is gone

The second I blink

Left all alone

I yawn

Trying to clear my mind

But it never works

It just makes things worse

Fills my mind with the things

I have done

I am drowned in darkness

Without a ray of sun

Completely alone

I yawn...

Reviews

[William Liston]

You've described "yawns" in a unique way; usually, people associate yawns with sleepiness, but here, you've described it as an attempt to clear your mind. I guess we all have unique ways of relieving stress. In this poem, you've described depression quite well, especially in the first four lines where you make it clear that you're depressed, even when you wake up in the morning. It's a terrible feeling that I hope you'll overcome. Thanks for sharing this piece.

- William Liston

[Tori Jones]

Thank you so much...

[Lord of mad men]

Great! I love this piece. It shows that even something that a seems so simple can grow hard with the passing of time if you are consumed in darkness. You did a great job showing you meaning behind your work. You work tell a story and the story is about you. You just wish to wake up and not be alone. You want to bask in the light because that when you think you will feel less alone.but you will just feel even more lonely. You must join others in the dark. I think this piece is full of hear and flows so greatly. I really enjoyed reading it. It is deep and very relatable. Yours truely a mad lord

[Tori Jones]

Thank you, I really appreciate your kind words Mad Lord.....

[ace]

Nice connection with the idea of yawning and dreams. Feels like your trying to express unfulfilled dreams because of a lack of time. I really liked it.

[Tori Jones]

Thank you....

[Karmee]

Very well written and expressed

[Tori Jones]

Thanks Kim, I always look forward to what you have to say. Stay safe, be blessed...

~Tori

[Karmee]

no problem and you too

[EvaThornburn]

Very well penned. Found it a pleasure to read. Very entertaining. Thanks, so much for sharing. Look forward to reading more of your writes. Eva

[Tori Jones]

You're welcome, and thank you for taking the time to read and review my peom...

[Esther]

Lovely poem and full of emotion. My favorite lines are:

"Trying to clear my mind
But it never works
It just makes things worse
Fills my mind with the things
I have done"

Because I can relate to them

[Tori Jones]

Thank you for the review...I wrote this poem while I was on vacation, and I'm really happy you like it.

[EvaThornburn]

Your welcome.