Who Cares?

Like a tree loses its leaves

I lose my hope

Like an ocean rolls with rage

I cry out in pain

Like a flower that wilts

I am slowly fading from the light

With every step I take

Soon there will be nothing else...

If I pass out of sight

Who would care, unless they are blind

And unable to see all of my flaws 

And mistakes in life

Having been pierced by the night

I will soon disappear from sight...

Reviews

[Saloni]

Real and ruff!
Creative and nice

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this poem is like falling and falling. words are like stairs down . you expres well your personal feelings. hopefuly there will be on the end also stairs up. great poem.

[Tori Jones]

Thank you....

[Karmee]

Very poetic, nicely expressed.
enjoyed

[Tori Jones]

Thank you, I really appreciate the review!