I Once Fell in Love

I once fell in love,

I was the olive branch

He was the dove...

I thought it was true

That he loved me for me

For I never knew

It wasn't to be

The two of us together

For eternity...

Reviews

[Jasper]

Wonderful imagery of the love-dove-olive branch triangle! You need to put more allusions like that into your poems. It brings it to life out of the abstract nature that free verse poetry has by grabbing some visual image for your readers. The solace and betrayal oozes out of the verses. Beauty in desolation! Nix the be verb too...unless it is necessary; it sucks the emotion out of any verse since it is the most impassive verb in English.

[Tori Jones]

Thanks for reviewing! And great advice, I'll keep it in mind...

[Karmee]

A wonderful write here, enjoyed

[Chris]

a most relatable moment... and "endings" come in so many flavors

[Tori Jones]

Thank you for being 'real'....

[Chris]

thank YOU for noticing the difference...

[Tori Jones]

No problem...

[Abhijit Das-The Poet]

Nice feelings expressed beautifully

[Tori Jones]

Thank you! I am honored to have my poems read by such a great poet, like yourself :)

[Abhijit Das-The Poet]

I am just a simple human being who is writing my feelings.Not a great poet

[Tori Jones]

I admire your modesty, but you are a great poet even if you don't believe it yourself!

[Abhijit Das-The Poet]

Thanks for the generosity.But I want to live in this world as a simple human being.

[Tori Jones]

Well, if that's what you want, I grant you your wish...

[Abhijit Das-The Poet]

Well where r u from?

[Tori Jones]

I am from Ohio...

[Abhijit Das-The Poet]

I am from India but presently in UAE for last two years.

[Tori Jones]

That's really cool!

[Tori Jones]

I need to go to bed now. Talk to you soon!

[Abhijit Das-The Poet]

Bye bye see u soon

[Abhijit Das-The Poet]

R u from Sardinia,Ohio?

[Tori Jones]

No, Mansfield...

[Abhijit Das-The Poet]

Ok that's nice

[Abhijit Das-The Poet]

So what r u doing?Student or working?

[Tori Jones]

I am in middle school...so, student.