Alone

 Alone in my grief

Alone in my pain

Alone in my sorrow

Alone in the rain

Through all of these tears

And all of these years

Alone

Reviews

[Adam Adams]

oh... that's deep here. very deep. very very deep.

loneliness never leave's us alone, may be, 'cause that's what its job be 'bout, so i guess, we shan't let it win... on love. i won't say if love's THAT good to overcome lone-liness, but yeah.. it could be just a WAY to give it a beat... because, love's being starved just like loneliness is. so you just have to choose one of 'em two: love or lone-liness... funny it is to say, both starts with "L".. which also stands on "looser"... perhaps, nobody's looser. if they are or would, they'd never be lone in grief. so, let tears kiss you lips, & your lips go savor its lime-taste.

not a bad short. your poetry's are more like a port of real-world where us people're living through.. either with the dust of disgust or the disgrace of grace. nice imagery here, but also a very heartfelt, though.

ps. being lone's good, but it shan't disturb us over-night.

[Tori Jones]

Yeah, I wrote this poem when I was in the hospital... Thank you for reading it....

[Adam Adams]

i'm sorry to hear 'bout your loneliness.. & the pain of life. May God bless you!

[Tori Jones]

And may you also be blessed...

[brian]

Let me make a suggestion Tori: Change the 5th and 6th lines, 'Of all my tears, From all the years' perhaps to something like, 'Through all of these tears, And all of these years..'

[Tori Jones]

Does that look better?

[brian]

Perfect! (=

[Tori Jones]

Alone has always been my favorite, It was my very first poem ever written down.