This was posted to my old account, and it's one of my favorite poems I've ever written. I'll keep it with me for a while.
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I found this so beautiful my friend, first the musical piece you choosed, fantastic, second the whole feeling of this, thrills me, because, you are one in harmony with your quill. With these higher words, you did touched the music, and the music touched you. You became one... Very brilliant, sensual, absolute ears here. :) Well done.
- Elisa
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
And thank you again. :) I'm happy to hear you enjoyed it well enough to put that little thing togeth.. read moreAnd thank you again. :) I'm happy to hear you enjoyed it well enough to put that little thing together for me.
I've always had trouble portraying sounds in my literary work, and also being a pianist, the struggle has agitated me to the extremes! For you to 'hear' my words means a lot.
Thanks again,
--Christoph Poe
11 Years Ago
You're more than welcome, my friend, sometimes, we need to be totally empty in mind, and body, to le.. read moreYou're more than welcome, my friend, sometimes, we need to be totally empty in mind, and body, to let music land, to feel it. I think honestly you achieved it here. This poem, is music... and brings me goosebumps, each time I return... fantastic Christoph. You are ever welcome. I shall come back soon for more. You're very talented. - Elisa
It isn’t easy using words to place us in the same mood that music does. Some think it impossible. Great theme.
In lines six and seven: should “With such smoothness. Effortless vibrations” be “with smooth effortless…”
In line eight: should “Rising on falling under the heat” be “Rising or falling under the heat”.
In line 13: should “it’s body so nimble” be “its nimble body
In line 14: should “Will scream its own tune” be “would scream its own tune”
In line 24: should “And try all rise.” be “and try to all rise.
You connected it to music so I love it. I play drums and I can just hear the words with each beats and crash. You did well on this one, I see why you like it.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you! I play the piano, so I'm very in tune with music, and writing is another passion of mine... read moreThank you! I play the piano, so I'm very in tune with music, and writing is another passion of mine. I'm slowly learning how to combine them.
11 Years Ago
Same here. I wrote some stuff but I don't know about it ha!
Wow, never thought I'd read a poem that sings. Great analogy of creative writing, poetry in particular?, to the instruments of an orchestra, for each word, each aspect of grammar or the intentional lack thereof, are playing their own notes, their own rhythms, to blend in with the piece as a whole, harmonizing with words in the next stanza, next paragraph, next sentence, until the reader reads the poem and it seems to all merge in one, climactic eruption of crisp, clear, complete high notes. Lovely poem, it evoked a tune (not Adagio, actually--that is Adagio, right?) but something faster (ironically) and more quickly and complexly interwoven. Thanks for sharing : )
You have captured the symphony so beautifully here. I don't think I can give you my unbiased opinion because I have been directly in the middle of symphony as I plucked and played. But, I can say that I haven't played for years so I connected with it emotionally. See how every poem or story you write will have a different effect on each individual. Thank you for helping me tap into that memory.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
It's always nice to hear readers connect so strongly with my work. :) You should consider playing ag.. read moreIt's always nice to hear readers connect so strongly with my work. :) You should consider playing again, by the way.
Yes, but you do awe...with words... The symphony comes to life in the language and the lines, and if one closes their eyes after the reading, violin strings and soft melodies can be heard. This was visceral and very sensory. I did enjoy the way that you used all of the music imagery and the sounds...breathtaking sounds...
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you kindly for your thoughts! I'm happy to see that you enjoyed it and got the feeling I was t.. read moreThank you kindly for your thoughts! I'm happy to see that you enjoyed it and got the feeling I was trying to portray.
really expressed love well here...excellent personification of the instruments...this poem comes alive!
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you! I really appreciate the noticing of the mechanics. :) (I could have worded that better, b.. read moreThank you! I really appreciate the noticing of the mechanics. :) (I could have worded that better, but maybe you knew what I was trying to say. Lol.)
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My name is Christoph and I'm from backwoods Alabama. It's really boring here, but the scenery is always gorgeous! I can't complain because its probably this environment that's brough.. more..
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