Just a kiss??

that one kiss that can tell it all

Sparks of passion

fill up the night skies

with a kiss of fireworks

now watch the heart

as it explodes.

Love upon love

shadows the soul

like it has been molded.

The mist of rush

like on coming traffic.

Such a sensational pleasure

like the work of magic.

No longer black

for it is all light.

What a feeling

when the lips

open up your sight.

Let me show you

it will be alright.

Let the sparks

take us deeper

into the night..

Reviews

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

I love this, It feels reminiscent of something... I just cant put my finger on it lol

Side note I wish you would structure this, To me it would give it more meaning. Ill message you with my idea. Hope I'm not overstepping if I am be sure to let me know.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

much better lol

[Who Cares]

This is beautiful, you have very strong powerful words in this poem. I agree with Samantha, I would love to see structure because it would help with the flow of the poem. You cannot really tell when one thought is ending and another one is beginning. Though I do respect that this was a freewrite that is truly admirable because it comes from the heart. You capture true loves kiss perfectly, it is like and insane rush; sparks, if you will. "Such a sensational pleasure like the work of magic" This was a beautiful simile. A sensational kiss comparable to magic, yes sir I do agree. In a grammatical aspect, you have done a phenomenal job. Capitalization is spot on, punctuation used exceptionally well. You leave the reader with something to think about and I enjoy that, You leave the reader with the image of a really passionate kiss, and their mind wonders. Beautfully written :D

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

To me, this is a poem of sensation, and love, and the savoring of them.
"What a feeling
when the lips
open up your sight." Love this!